Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.

Why might this be the case?

What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

introduction

nowadays people like to be self employed as compared to do work in a company or organization they want to do work himself not to do work under peoples

body paragraph 1

i agree with this statement people choose to be self employed as compared to do work in companies or organization because nowadays people know that there is no benefit to do work in companies because companies dont provide sellory to workers as they work for companies means they do alot of work some times they dont do part time jobs they stay over time in companies for companies work for example they do thier own work like to do small business they gain alot of money as copared to do work in companies in conclusion self employment is better than work in companies

body paragraph 2

on the other hand there are some advantages of to be self employe however some time our business dont grow in good condition and we ont have money to purchase somethings forxample if people work in companies some times companies give bonus to employs there are alot of things in the face of bonus like umrah tickets ,some time flat,car and sometime cash in coclusion i believe that both have benefits and disadvantages

conclusion

in conclusion we concluded that some time self employment is also good as copared to do work under companies owner sometimes people become billioners because they do their own works so thats why self employment is better than work in companies or organization

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both questions: you suggest that people choose self-employment to earn more and avoid working under an employer, and you identify unstable business growth and lack of money as disadvantages. However, the response only partially develops these points. The claim that companies provide no benefit or salary is too broad, and the example of working overtime does not clearly explain why self-employment is preferable. The second paragraph shifts to bonuses offered by companies, which is relevant as a comparison but leaves the disadvantages of self-employment under-explained. Your position that self-employment is better is clear in the conclusion, but it is not consistently supported. Explain each reason with a specific, realistic example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the paragraphs broadly correspond to the task’s two questions. This gives the reader a basic sense of structure. However, ideas within the paragraphs are often difficult to follow: the first body paragraph moves from company salaries to overtime, small businesses and earnings without clear links. The second begins with “on the other hand” but then discusses both business difficulties and company bonuses, so its focus is unclear. Repeated phrases such as “in conclusion” inside body paragraphs also interrupt progression. Use one main idea per paragraph, order supporting details logically, and connect them with clear references and transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “self-employed,” “small business,” “bonus,” and “billionaires,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repeated, especially “work in companies” and “self employment.” There are also frequent spelling and word-choice problems, such as “sellory,” “employs,” and “copared,” which can make the reader pause. Some expressions are unclear or unnatural, including “in the face of bonus” and “our business dont grow in good condition.” Build a more precise set of terms for income, job security and business risks, and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express reasons and contrasts, and there are some simple sentence patterns that communicate the general topic. However, sentence structures are limited, and attempts to combine several ideas often produce faulty sentences. For example, “people know that there is no benefit to do work in companies because companies dont provide sellory to workers as they work for companies” has unclear clause relationships and missing or incorrect grammatical forms. Subject–verb agreement, articles, verb forms and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “our business dont grow” and the long, unpunctuated first body paragraph. Use shorter, complete sentences first, then practise joining them with accurate subordinate clauses and conjunctions.

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