Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.

Why might this be the case?

What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Self employed and employed

This passage is about employed and self employed. Employed means work for a company and self employed means your own bussines. In this passage we discuise the advantages of employed and self employed. Today many people prefer thair own bussines for work becouse it is best way to become rich. Most of the people in the world who successed do thair work even famous people in the world like Elon Musk do thair own bussines like starts from a small and gradually the successe.if take the example Jeffbesos he start his work in 1990 and after thirteen year of hardworking he successed . On the other hand it also have disadvantages. if we fail in the work did not successed we lost our all the waelth if life. So every thing have advantages and disadvantages. The other thing is self employed it means that work for a company many people chose this for living. If we take the example of governoment jobes many people go to this way becouse this is more effective and the salery comes every month. so they thinks that it is best way earn money and they get many opportunities like medical and othe opertunities. On the other hand it has also disadvantages like people spend thair whole life in doning only one work and the become tired and peaceless. Spending whole life for one work is not so easy. So self employed is not so easy. Nowadays many people chose self emplyed work for thair business it is effective and becomming very papular.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both questions: you suggest that people choose self-employment to build a successful business and become wealthy, and you mention the risk of losing wealth if the business fails. You also identify disadvantages of company employment, such as repetitive work and limited variety. However, the response does not consistently focus on the task: the discussion of employed work and its drawbacks takes space from explaining why people choose self-employment and its disadvantages. The examples of Elon Musk and Jeff Bezos are brief and do not clearly support the claims made; the Jeff Bezos example is also difficult to follow. Develop a few relevant reasons with clearer explanation, and make the distinction between the two types of work precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, and phrases such as “On the other hand” and “If we take the example” signal contrast and examples. However, ideas are not arranged in a clear progression: the response moves from self-employment to company jobs, then returns to self-employment, and the final sentence repeats an earlier point rather than concluding the discussion. Paragraphing would help separate reasons for choosing self-employment from its disadvantages. Some links are also unclear, particularly “The other thing is self employed it means that work for a company,” which makes the relationship between the ideas difficult to follow. Plan a sequence of points and use linking expressions only where they accurately show that relationship.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “self-employed,” “business,” “advantages and disadvantages,” “salary,” and “opportunities,” so the reader can identify the general topic. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “work,” “people,” and “successful.” Frequent spelling errors such as “bussines,” “salery,” and “opertunities,” along with inaccurate forms such as “peaceless,” make the writing less clear and natural. Some expressions are also imprecise, for example “it is best way to become rich” and “lost our all the waelth.” Build a more accurate set of phrases for business risks, income security, and career independence, and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response mainly uses short, simple statements and attempts a few longer structures with “because,” “if,” and “on the other hand.” These attempts show some effort to connect ideas, but sentence patterns are limited and errors are frequent. For example, “Most of the people … who successed do thair work” has an unclear verb structure, while “if we fail in the work did not successed” combines incompatible forms. There are also recurring problems with articles, agreement, and tense, as in “it also have disadvantages” and “he start his work.” Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check that verb tense and agreement remain consistent within each sentence.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.