Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.

Why might this be the case?

What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Nowadays many people wants to be self employed rather than they work in a company or an organiztion. Its a very true case. And from many aspects it's very best. Because when we do work in any company we are under theirs. And when we work in our company and we do our business we are not able to obey their task. And in our organization we do any work we wanted. Their is my friend. They do work in many organizations. And now he has his own business. He has been very satisfied in doing his business. When he works in any others organization they obeys their task and when they donot like their task or work. They insult him or even they donot give their salary. They even get's out him from their company. He changes many companies and do work in many companies but he face this problem. When he work's in others company they do many which they donot likes it. Then he starts his own business. Now he is very satisfied in doing his business. Then he do those work he likes and donot do those tasks he donot likes. Now no one ask him to do those tasks which he donot like. Now he comes on that time which he wants. Their are also some disadvantages of being self employed. When the company gone to loss it is very difficult to manage. Many people left the company and it is very difficult to hire new one's

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address both questions: you suggest that self-employment offers independence, using your friend’s experience, and mention business losses and difficulty hiring as disadvantages. These points are relevant, but the response only partially develops them. The explanation of why people choose this path repeats that a person can do preferred tasks and avoid an employer’s demands, without exploring other reasons such as flexibility or potential income. The disadvantages are especially brief and unclear: “When the company gone to loss” is not explained, and the hiring point is left unfinished. The example is useful, but its details are repetitive and do not fully support a clear, balanced answer. Develop each question with distinct reasons and explain their consequences.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic sequence from the general claim, to your friend’s experience, and then to disadvantages, so the reader can identify the main topic. However, ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs, and progression is weakened by repeated details about your friend changing companies and being satisfied with his business. Linking words such as “And,” “Because,” and “Then” are used repeatedly, sometimes to begin sentences without showing a precise relationship between ideas. References are also confusing: “Their is my friend. They do work” shifts between singular and plural, and “they” can refer to either the friend or employers. Group the response into an introduction, reasons, and disadvantages; use clear pronouns and more varied, accurate links.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on words such as “work,” “company,” “task,” and “likes.” This limits your ability to express the reasons and disadvantages precisely. Some phrases are difficult to understand or do not fit the intended meaning, including “we are under theirs,” “they obeys their task,” and “the company gone to loss.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, such as “organiztion,” “donot,” and “get’s,” which make the writing less clear. You communicate the general idea of independence, but need more accurate topic vocabulary and collocations. Practise phrases such as “make independent decisions,” “earn a stable income,” and “face financial losses,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences use simple structures, and attempts to connect clauses often contain frequent errors that sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Subject–verb agreement is inconsistent: “many people wants,” “they obeys,” and “he face” should use matching verb forms. Tense and verb-form errors also occur in “When the company gone to loss” and “Then he do those work.” Articles and sentence construction need attention, as in “in any others organization” and “Their is my friend.” The response shows little variety beyond repeated simple clauses joined with “and” or “when.” Practise accurate present and past forms, agreement, and sentence boundaries, then add a few controlled complex sentences to explain cause and effect.

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