Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.

Why might this be the case?

What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Nowa days some people choose to be self empolyed,instead to work for a company.

Many people hold the view that today many people think they make own a business rather then to work under the supermacy.i firmly agree with this perspective this essay will discuss the logical reasons with examples.

alongwith real life examples to provide a clear understanding to the readers.

now aday, trend has breen increased in young genration they would not work under the supervision they are more talented and want to know acheive his goal that,s why they have decission making they decide, about her future.for instance a student study from abroad and he want to start her business along with they provid. jobs from other people,

the primery reason is that in our conuntry the situation has become a serious for the sake of unemployment. government has try to provide resources to people they overcome the unemploy but it matter on world economic, whearse the circumastances are sever,government have no morejob they promot those people who want to start her business they provide a small amount of loan but also a strict conditions some people cannot fulfill their requirements government should make policies to make easy that every people start theie work although a small scale, in coclusion, the goverment can acheive the resoures to get better condition of her country and overcome the unempoly. government should make soft policies that everyone utilise this inst

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response makes a limited attempt to address the question, but it does not clearly explain both why people choose self-employment and what disadvantages it brings. It mentions independence from supervision, decision-making, unemployment and government loans, which are relevant to possible reasons. However, these points are difficult to follow and are not developed with clear explanations or specific examples. The example about a student studying abroad and starting a business is incomplete, and the discussion of government support does not identify disadvantages such as financial risk, unstable income or lack of employee benefits. The opening also says “I firmly agree,” although the task asks for an explanation rather than an opinion. The response is 10 words below the required minimum, and the ideas need substantially fuller development.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is an attempt to organise the response, with an opening, discussion of reasons and a concluding statement. Some progression can be seen from independence and decision-making to unemployment and government loans. However, the organisation is difficult to follow because ideas are joined in long, unclear sequences, and the paragraphing does not consistently separate the task’s two questions. The opening repeats the idea that people choose to run a business, while the sentence beginning “alongwith real life examples” is disconnected from the surrounding text. Linking expressions such as “for instance,” “the primary reason” and “in conclusion” are used, but they do not always make the relationship between ideas clear. Use one paragraph for reasons and another for disadvantages, with shorter sentences and clear links.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response attempts vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “supervision,” “decision making,” “unemployment,” “resources” and “loan.” These choices show some awareness of the subject, but the range is basic and several word choices or spellings make meaning difficult to understand. For example, “supermacy” appears to mean authority or supervision, while “promot those people” does not clearly express the intended support. Repeated references to “government,” “people” and “business” also limit flexibility. Improve accuracy by learning common topic collocations and checking spelling and word forms. More precise expressions such as “financial security,” “business start-up costs” and “unstable income” would help explain both the reasons for self-employment and its disadvantages.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences and uses basic structures to express reasons and examples, but grammatical control is inconsistent. Many sentences contain errors that make the intended relationships unclear, as in “they are more talented and want to know acheive his goal” and “government have no morejob.” There are problems with subject–verb agreement, pronouns, articles, verb forms and sentence boundaries. For example, “a student study from abroad and he want” does not maintain correct agreement, and several clauses are joined without appropriate punctuation. The range of sentence structures is limited, and attempts to combine multiple ideas often become difficult to follow. Practise writing accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses while checking agreement, tense and punctuation.

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