Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.

Why might this be the case?

What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Work for a company or an organization becomes no more harmful for employers to afford their lives due to heavy costs of leaving expensis in addition to work in an forcefully envronment rather than friendly. Nowaday's most of the people choose to work to be self employed, rather than to work for a company under instrictions. However, they are resulted in several demerits. We will discuss and gave our opinion.

Due to heavey cost of expens, in nowadays employes are not be able to afford their lives due to low salaries. Additionally, they also work in pressure and faced the anger of their boss if they are not performed their work properly. Many peple choose to be self employed, so they can work when they want in a friendly environment and, they can also afford their expens in addition to live a happier life. They can do anything and, it is own responsible for mistake like a shop owner performs mistakes in his work or they opened their shop late, so no one cannot say anything to owner.

However, they are also resulted in many disadvantages like if un employed started their own buiseness they faced a lot lof difficulties to fullfill the requirments such as employes, facilities in addition to a work place. Good experience are major requirment. Therfore, the buisness will be fails and they faced a big loss. For instance, if he opened a software buisness and he did not know well about computer, so they will fail.

Overall, I think first we need a experience to be become a good self employed. This is can we are able to work with a better way

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: you suggest that self-employment offers more control over working conditions and income, and identify start-up difficulties, the need for experience, and the risk of financial loss. The shop-owner example helps illustrate independence, while the software-business example supports the disadvantage. However, several points are unclear or only briefly explained. For instance, the claim that self-employed people can “afford their expens” is not connected clearly to how self-employment improves income, and the conclusion introduces the need for experience without fully summarising your answer. Develop each reason with a clearer explanation and a relevant example, and state your overall view more directly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, a paragraph on reasons, a paragraph on disadvantages, and a conclusion. Linking expressions such as “Additionally,” “However,” and “For instance” show an attempt to guide the reader. Nevertheless, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, and connections between ideas are not always clear. The opening sentence is hard to interpret, and the shift from low salaries to a “friendly environment” and then to responsibility needs clearer links. Some transitions, including “Overall,” do not lead to a complete concluding point. Organise each paragraph around one main idea, then explain and illustrate it in a logical sequence; use referencing and connectors only where their relationship is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “self-employed,” “low salaries,” “friendly environment,” “requirements,” and “big loss.” These choices make the general subject understandable. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or misspelled expressions make meaning harder to follow, such as “heavy cost of expens,” “forcefully environment,” “buisness,” and “fullfill.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “afford their lives” and “work for a company under instructions.” Build a more precise set of expressions for employment, business costs, and financial risk, and check spelling and collocations carefully. More accurate topic vocabulary would help you express your ideas without relying on repeated general words such as “work” and “difficulties.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “if” and “so,” but control is inconsistent. Frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, and sentence construction sometimes make the reader work to understand your meaning. For example, “they are not performed their work properly” has an incorrect verb pattern, while “the buisness will be fails” combines incompatible forms. The sentence beginning “This is can we are able” is also difficult to interpret. Articles and plurals are often missing or inconsistent, as in “a experience” and “employes.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using one clear subordinate clause. Check subject–verb agreement and verb forms when revising.

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