Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.

Why might this be the case?

What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In present time many individual wants to self-employed rather than work in some shops, companies and organisation. It shows from last one decades. It has many reason why individual follow and diverd in self-employement and devloped small business.

In this contemporary epoch many individual beleive that work is borring and work can not give freedom. Moreover this time is technologies time everyone is inteligence use and create some technocal skill so that they are earn money in few time, while comapny take more time to improve their skill and devloped their ideas so they are chose to self-employement rather than work in companies or organisation.

Moreover, in this contemporary epoch many financial helps are available and taken easily through many government scheme. In addition, government can also helps public to devloped their small business and also they provide loan with scheme like public got loan without intrest or lower intrest rate. So that self-employement easier to public.

Some individual beleive that self-employement gives more chance to devlope thier self and work for their own business with their own things and ideas. However, also it has some drawbacks like self-employement takes risk, also if some time their work and ideas is not sucess than they are fall down and than they are put in debt. This debt are to deep and after that individual are throw back side from their future and also they take more time to rising and devloped them. So it has big disadvantages.

In conclusion, every decision has both advantages and disadvantages it depends on their decision moreover their work after take the decision. One quote is very famous coin has two side king and queen so if you can not take chance than you can not do anything. Even suceess will not come overnight it takes time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: you suggest that people seek freedom and the chance to use their own skills and ideas, and you identify financial risk and debt as disadvantages. These points are relevant, but the reasons are only partly explained. For example, the claim that company work takes longer to develop skills is not clarified, and the discussion of government loans does not show how this specifically motivates people to become self-employed. The disadvantage paragraph gives a possible consequence, but would be stronger with a concrete example or a clearer explanation of how income uncertainty affects a business owner. Your conclusion offers a general comment about risk rather than summarising the main reasons and drawback. Develop each point with a specific explanation or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for reasons and disadvantages, and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify the main sections. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and several links are mechanical or repetitive: “Moreover” begins multiple paragraphs, while “So that” is used to connect ideas without a complete, clear relationship. The final paragraph shifts from summarising the topic to a coin metaphor and a comment about success, so it does not bring the discussion together effectively. Some references, such as “they” and “this debt,” are also difficult to follow because the people or situation they refer to are not always explicit. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each explanation directly to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “self-employment,” “government scheme,” “loan,” “interest rate,” and “debt.” There is also some effort to express abstract ideas, such as freedom and developing one’s skills. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “contemporary epoch,” “individual,” and “self-employment.” Frequent spelling errors, including “beleive,” “technocal,” and “sucess,” make the writing less clear and reduce control of vocabulary. Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “work is boring” to express dissatisfaction with employment and “fall down” for business failure. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling; a smaller set of well-controlled topic-specific expressions would make your ideas easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “while,” “however,” and “if.” This shows an effort to vary sentence structure, but complex sentences are often difficult to follow because of frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries. For example, “many individual wants to self-employed” has problems with plural agreement and the verb pattern, while “government can also helps” combines incompatible verb forms. In “if some time their work and ideas is not sucess,” the conditional clause also has agreement and structure problems. Several sentences run together, especially in the conclusion, where punctuation does not clearly separate the ideas. Practise building accurate basic sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time and check subject–verb agreement.

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