Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.

Why might this be the case?

What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

These days an incrasing number of people choose own business. In that time certain employes select to be self-employe, rather than to work in other company or organisation. All the aspects would be discussed in upcoming paragraphs with valid reasons and examples.

People is choosing own business because they become independent and achieve all goal. If they work in another company, they must be can follow company rule. However when they start own business they do work on own perspective. Moreover own boss for company. That's types of many benefits of own bussiness. For result, first my mother did job at someone shop. And also she was reached at time shop. But now they independent and open her own shop. As a result, she is hiring employes and now she is free on work. Only somtime she do work.

Furthermore, many disadvatage of being self-employed. When they start own bussiness so also they invest and risky work. Sometime particular bussiness become flop after we might not balance finacial problem. In addition sometime they have no gaidence properly that they also face trouble situation. In starting bussiness they should face money problem and try to how they can attrect customer their product. As example, One of my friend start own clothes shop but customer did not visit shop. Because she did not give advice from other. As a result, she closed shop.

In conclusion, self-employed are good but in starting they can do hard work, give their full of time and invest money. Nevertheless some advantage and some dis-advantage so first they should understand. After they could be becomes self-employed.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both questions: you explain that self-employment can offer independence and control, and identify financial risk, difficulty attracting customers, and limited guidance as disadvantages. The examples about your mother’s shop and your friend’s clothing shop make the points relevant. However, the reasons for choosing this work are less fully explained than the disadvantages: for instance, “achieve all goal” is not clarified with a specific goal or explanation of why independence matters. Some details are also unclear, such as your mother being “free on work” while working only sometimes. Develop each main reason with a clearer explanation and ensure examples directly illustrate it; this would make the response more complete and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, separate paragraphs for reasons and disadvantages, and a conclusion. Linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Furthermore,” and “As a result” help signal relationships between ideas. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. For example, “For result, first my mother…” does not clearly show how the example supports the preceding point, and “Nevertheless some advantage and some dis-advantage” is difficult to follow. References such as “they” and “she” also become confusing in the account of your mother’s business. Use topic sentences to guide each paragraph, connect examples explicitly to the point they illustrate, and check that pronouns have clear referents.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “independent,” “invest,” “financial problem,” and “customer,” and you attempt to express ideas about business risks and control. However, the range and accuracy are limited, with repeated use of “own business” and noticeable spelling and word-choice errors. Examples include “incrasing,” “employes,” “disadvatage,” and “gaidence”; phrases such as “flop” and “free on work” are also imprecise or unnatural in this context. These choices sometimes make the intended meaning harder to understand. Build a more accurate set of topic-specific expressions and check spelling, word forms, and collocations when revising.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “If they work in another company…” and a reason introduced by “Because.” However, control of sentence structure and basic forms is inconsistent. For example, “People is choosing” has subject–verb disagreement, “they must be can follow” combines incompatible verb forms, and “she was reached at time shop” does not form a clear grammatical sentence. Articles and possessives are also often missing or inaccurate, as in “open her own shop.” These errors can make some ideas difficult to follow. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, verb patterns after modal verbs, and complete sentence construction before adding more complex clauses.

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