Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

the bar chart depict average of viewers to ashdow musem from past year to present after it was refurbished. overall, before to after the range of visitor to ashdown museum.

firstly, year beafore 15% people was satisfied with the surveys and 5% community was comfortable with

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response makes only a minimal attempt to describe the visuals and does not provide a clear, accurate summary of their main features. It mentions 15% and 5%, but incorrectly says that 15% of people were satisfied before refurbishment; the chart shows 15% were very satisfied, while 30% were satisfied. The reference to “5% community” is unclear and does not identify the chart’s no-response category. There is no meaningful comparison of the two periods or overview of the rise in visitor numbers from 74,000 to 92,000 and the shift towards greater satisfaction after refurbishment. The response is also 104 words below the required minimum. To improve, report the main trends and support them with accurate figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, with an opening statement followed by “firstly,” but the ideas do not develop into a coherent summary. The opening repeats the before-and-after framing without stating a clear overview, and the final phrase, “comfortable with,” is unfinished, leaving the reader unsure what the figure refers to. The response does not group or compare the visitor total and satisfaction results. Use a clear sequence: introduce the visuals, summarise the overall changes, then compare the key survey categories. Complete each sentence and use linking expressions only where they clarify the relationship between figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of task-related words, including “visitors,” “refurbished,” and “surveys,” so the topic is partly recognisable. However, vocabulary is limited and several choices or spellings make the meaning unclear: “viewers” is not appropriate for museum visitors, “community” does not describe a survey response, and “comfortable with” does not accurately express satisfaction. There are also misspellings such as “ashdow,” “musem,” and “beafore.” Use precise chart vocabulary, especially the categories “very satisfied,” “satisfied,” “dissatisfied,” “very dissatisfied,” and “no response,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response attempts simple sentence forms, but grammatical control is weak and the short sample offers little variety. In “the bar chart depict,” the singular subject requires “depicts”; “year beafore 15% people was satisfied” also lacks a clear grammatical structure and has incorrect agreement. The opening phrase “overall, before to after the range of visitor” is not a complete, clear sentence, while “comfortable with” is left without an object or completion. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, for example, “Visitor numbers increased after the refurbishment.” Then check agreement, articles, and sentence endings.

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