Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

A table shows the increment of number of visitors of a museum after it's reburbishment and a pie chart that shows the change in visitors mindset whether they are satisfied or not by the Ashdown Museum. Here it can be seen that the number of visitors increased by 15,000+ visitors after their refurbishment. Before the refurbishment 40 visitors have showed disatisfaction, 15 have said very satisfied and 10 were satisfied. On the other hand 5 had no responses. Wherease after refurbishment the number of visitors who were disatisfied before went down significantly from 40 to 15. 35 visitors were very satisfied, and 40 people displayed satisfiction this time. This time both the number of no response and very dissatisfied remained at 5. A significant change in visitors mindset is displayed by the pie chart compared to the year before and after the reburbishment of the Ashdown museum.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the main subject and report the overall rise in visitor numbers, as well as the broad shift from dissatisfaction towards satisfaction. However, the response only partially covers the data: the increase is 18,000 (from 74,000 to 92,000), not merely “15,000+,” and several survey figures are misreported. Before refurbishment, 30% were satisfied, not 10%; 10% were very dissatisfied, which is omitted. Afterward, 5% were very dissatisfied and 5% gave no response, so these categories did not both “remain at 5.” The overview is also not clearly separated from details. The response is three words below the required minimum. Include the key figures accurately and give a concise overview of the main changes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response follows a broadly understandable order: it introduces the visuals, describes the period before refurbishment, and then compares the results afterward. Linking phrases such as “On the other hand” and “Wherease after refurbishment” show an attempt to connect the two periods. However, there is no clear paragraphing or distinct overview, and the final sentence repeats the general idea of a change without adding a useful summary. Some connections are awkward or unclear, particularly “Wherease after refurbishment the number of visitors who were disatisfied before went down,” which makes the comparison harder to follow. Organise the report into an introduction, an overview, and grouped details, and use linking expressions only where they clarify the relationship between figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing the visuals, including “increased,” “went down significantly,” and “remained,” and the reader can generally understand the intended comparisons. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for a formal data report. “Visitors mindset” is not an appropriate way to describe survey satisfaction, while “displayed satisfiction” and “showed disatisfaction” are awkward. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “reburbishment,” “disatisfaction,” “Wherease,” and “disatisfied.” Use precise terms such as “visitor satisfaction,” “respondents,” and “the proportion of visitors,” and check spelling carefully to make the report more fluent and accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, and the main message is usually understandable. However, errors in sentence construction and verb forms occur repeatedly. For example, “Before the refurbishment 40 visitors have showed disatisfaction” uses an unsuitable tense and an incorrect verb form; “the number of visitors who were disatisfied before went down” is an awkwardly constructed comparison. The opening sentence also joins the table and chart information in a way that makes the relationship unclear. Articles and possessives need attention in phrases such as “after it's reburbishment.” Aim for clear, controlled sentences, use past simple consistently to describe the two completed periods, and check subject–verb patterns and punctuation.

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