Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The table illustrates the total number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished, while the two pie charts compare the results of surveys of visitor satisfaction during the same periods.

Overall, the museum experience an increase in visitor number following the refurbishment. Moreover, visitor satisfaction surged considerably, with a higher proportion of people reporting they were satisfied or very satisfied.

The total number of visitors before refurbishment were 74000, and after the refurbishment 92000 visitors. Therefore, the visitor rise to 18000

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the subject of the table and charts and give a relevant overview: visitor numbers rose, and satisfaction improved. The two visitor totals, 74,000 and 92,000, are accurate, as is the increase of 18,000. However, the response stops before reporting any survey figures, so the main changes in satisfaction are not supported with data; for example, the satisfied and very satisfied shares rose, while dissatisfaction fell. The response is also substantially below the required 150 words, which leaves the task only minimally addressed. To improve, complete the comparison by selecting key percentages from both years and explaining the main contrasts, rather than ending after the visitor total.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview beginning with “Overall,” and a paragraph giving the visitor totals. The contrast signalled by “while” in the opening sentence also helps orient the reader. However, the progression is incomplete: the final paragraph ends abruptly after “Therefore, the visitor rise to 18000,” and there is no organised account of the survey results. Cohesive links are limited, and the overview is not developed into a full comparison. Build a clear sequence by describing visitor numbers first, then grouping the satisfaction results into positive and negative responses, using links such as “by contrast” and “whereas” where appropriate.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use several relevant terms for describing the visuals, including “total number of visitors,” “refurbishment,” “survey,” and “visitor satisfaction.” “Surged considerably” also attempts to convey a marked change. However, the vocabulary range is limited by the short response, and some combinations are awkward or imprecise: “visitor number” and “the visitor rise” are less natural than standard chart-reporting expressions. The phrase “museum experience an increase” also uses the wrong form of the verb, though that is a grammar issue. Aim for precise, varied language such as “visitor numbers increased” and “the proportion reporting dissatisfaction declined,” and use the chart categories consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

There is some control of sentence construction, including a complex opening sentence with “while” and a separate overview introduced by “Moreover.” However, errors are noticeable in the limited sample. In “the museum experience an increase,” the verb form is incorrect; “visitor number” should be plural in this context, and “the total number … were 74000” has subject–verb disagreement because the grammatical subject is singular. The final sentence, “Therefore, the visitor rise to 18000,” is also incomplete or malformed, with an incorrect verb form and no clear finished statement. Check agreement and tense, and proofread each sentence for a complete clause. Adding accurate comparisons with varied sentence patterns would also demonstrate a broader grammatical range.

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