Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The table compares tha amount of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year and after it was uptaded, while charts illustrate the consquence of surveys askind visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same time periods.

Overall, it is clear that a considerable amount of tourists visit after refurbishment. While, very satisfied and satisfied feedback significantly increase. No response remain same in two time period of year.

During the year before refurbishment 74,000 people visit the museum, whlie there feedback largest proportion of people dissatisfied by 40%. However, 30% was satisfied. 10% people very dissatisfied and 15% vistiors very satisfied. No response was least common at 5%.

Year after updated the musem, attract considrable amount of tourists 92,000. 35% people very satisfied as compare to before refurbishment. 40%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the main comparison that visitor numbers rose after refurbishment, from 74,000 to 92,000, and note that satisfaction improved while non-response stayed at 5%. These are relevant features. However, the response is incomplete: it stops after “40%” and does not report the after-refurbishment figures for dissatisfaction, very dissatisfied responses, or no response, nor does it give a complete comparison of the survey results. Some details are also unclear, such as “a considerable amount of tourists visit after refurbishment.” The response contains 112 words, below the required 150, which limits the coverage and development of the summary. Include a concise overview and complete the key comparisons using the chart data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs referring to the two periods. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, the progression is weakened because the final paragraph ends abruptly at “40%,” leaving the after-refurbishment comparison unfinished. Some links between ideas are also awkward or unclear, as in “While, very satisfied and satisfied feedback significantly increase,” where the contrast marker does not fit the sentence. Organise the details in parallel—for example, compare satisfaction categories before and after refurbishment—and use clear linking phrases such as “by contrast” or “whereas” to make the comparisons easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “refurbishment,” “proportion,” “dissatisfied,” and “survey,” and the reader can generally identify the topic. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling problems make the account less clear. Phrases such as “amount of visitors,” “satisfied feedback,” and “attract considerable amount of tourists” are not natural ways to describe the data; “number of visitors” and “satisfaction ratings” would be more precise. Misspellings such as “tha,” “uptaded,” “consquence,” and “musem” are noticeable. Build a reliable set of chart-description phrases and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast with “While” and a clause beginning “how satisfied they were.” However, grammatical control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. For example, “No response remain same” needs subject–verb agreement and an article or clearer phrasing, while “During the year before refurbishment 74,000 people visit” uses an incorrect tense for a completed period. The sentence beginning “While” is also incomplete as written, and the final paragraph is unfinished. Use past tense consistently for the two periods, check agreement and sentence boundaries, and make sure every sentence has a complete main clause.

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