Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The table compare the number of visitors before and after renovation of the Ashdowns museum, while pie charts illustrate the survey of tourists satisfaction before and after the refurbishment of of museum. Overall, it is apparent that after the renovation of museum the number of visitors increased significantly, while before refurbishment there were higher number of dissatisfied. After the renovation, the proportion of very satisfied and satisfied visitors increased over the time period.

Turning to details, the number of tourists visited before renovation in a year were 74,000 which increased with the over the time period after the refurbishment of museum the number visitors were reached to 92,000 in a year. According to pie chart, the proportion of very satisfied visitors before the refurbishment were accounted for 15%, while the percentage of satisfied traveller were 30%. The percentage of dissatisfied tourists were significantly higher than other nearly 40%. The proportion of very dissatisfied and no response by travellers 10% and 5% respectively.

After the redevelopment of Ashdown Museum, the strongly satisfied visitors were increased significantly to 35% and 10% increased in the percentage of satisfied tourists, while the dissatisfied and very dissatisfied percentage of visitors after the restoration dropped to 15% and 5% respectively. Similarly, 5% of travellers had not respond about the renovation of museum.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You cover the main features and give a clear overview: visitor numbers rose from 74,000 to 92,000, while satisfaction improved after refurbishment. The figures you report for the satisfaction categories are also accurate, including the unchanged 5% with no response. This supports a well-focused summary of both the table and charts. To make the account more fully developed, state the overall contrast more precisely: before refurbishment, dissatisfied and very dissatisfied responses together made up half of respondents, whereas after it they fell to one fifth. Also, “increased over the time period” is vague for the satisfaction categories; explicitly compare the before-and-after percentages rather than describing a general trend.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall shape: an introduction and overview are followed by details about the earlier and later periods. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Turning to details,” and “Similarly” help signal the stages of the report, and the reader can follow the main comparisons. However, some connections are awkward or repetitive, particularly “which increased with the over the time period after the refurbishment,” where the relationship between the figures is difficult to follow. The final paragraph also combines several category changes in one long sentence. For stronger progression, group the satisfaction increases together and the decreases together, and use concise comparisons so that each sentence develops one clear point.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “dissatisfied,” and “refurbishment,” and the meaning is generally clear. There are also attempts to vary wording, such as “renovation,” “redevelopment,” and “restoration.” However, some choices are imprecise or unnatural in this context: “strongly satisfied” is not the usual chart category, and “travellers” is less suitable than “respondents” or “visitors” when describing survey results. Phrases such as “the number visitors” and “had not respond” also show problems with word form or collocation. Aim for consistent, precise terms for the categories and avoid changing labels in ways that could make the data less clear.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “while” and a time clause beginning “After the redevelopment.” The main information remains understandable, but grammatical control is uneven. Examples include “The table compare,” “the number visitors were reached,” and “the proportion … were accounted for,” which show problems with agreement, sentence construction, and verb forms. Articles and repeated words also affect accuracy, as in “of of museum.” Some sentences become difficult to manage because several comparisons are joined together. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and past-tense reporting, and build comparisons in shorter, complete clauses. More consistently accurate sentences would make the range you attempt more effective.

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