Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The tables illustrate the numbers of visittors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the after it was refurbished. Overall, it is clear that the total number of visters to Ashdown Museum during the year before refurbishment in 76,000 people.While the total number of visitors to Ashdown Museum in during the year after refurbishmentin 92,000 people . Firstly, the very satisfied people in 15%, The satisfied in 30 %, dissatisfied in 40 %, very dissatisfied 10%, no response in 5% in results of surveys of visitors satisfaction the year refurbishment. Secondly, very

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the topic and report several figures from the first survey, including 15% very satisfied, 30% satisfied and 40% dissatisfied. However, the response is incomplete: it gives the visitor total as 76,000 before refurbishment, whereas the chart shows 74,000, and it stops at “Secondly, very” without reporting the after-refurbishment satisfaction results. There is also no clear overview of the main changes, such as the rise in visitors to 92,000 and the improvement in satisfaction. The response contains 84 words, below the required 150, which leaves much of the task unaddressed. To improve, include an overview and compare the key figures from both periods accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: “Overall” introduces a summary, and “Firstly” and “Secondly” suggest a sequence. However, the ideas do not develop into a coherent report because the second point is left unfinished and the response ends abruptly. The opening also repeats the museum’s name and visitor-total information, while the survey figures are presented as a list rather than grouped into meaningful comparisons. Some linking is mechanical, and punctuation makes the boundaries between ideas unclear, as in “people.While”. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and the detailed comparisons, and connect related figures with clear contrasts such as “whereas” or “by comparison.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “refurbished,” “total number of visitors,” and the satisfaction categories. This gives the reader a basic sense of the subject. However, the range is narrow and several words are repeated, particularly “visitors” and “Ashdown Museum.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, such as “visittors” and “visters,” and the phrase “results of surveys of visitors satisfaction” is awkward. Aim for accurate, concise expressions such as “visitor satisfaction survey” and “visitor numbers.” You could also use comparison vocabulary, for example “increased,” “fell,” and “accounted for,” to describe the changes rather than listing categories alone.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few sentence forms, including an opening sentence and a contrast beginning with “While,” but grammatical control is inconsistent. Several clauses are incomplete or lack a verb: “the very satisfied people in 15%” and “The satisfied in 30%” do not form complete sentences. The visitor-total sentence also has an unclear structure: “the total number … in 76,000 people,” and the later “While” clause is not properly joined to a main clause. Punctuation and spacing further obscure sentence boundaries. Practise complete subject–verb structures, such as “The proportion who were very satisfied was 15%,” and check that every subordinate clause is attached to a complete sentence.

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