Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The table gives information about the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum before and after a refurbishment, while the pie charts illustrate the visitor satisfaction on the refurbishment over a period of time.

Overall, the number of visitors increased after the refurbishment, whereas the satisfaction level increased, in marked contrast to dissatisfaction.

Before refurbishment, the numbers were 74,000, and about two-fifths of that portion were dissatisfied and about 10 percent were very dissatisfied. Five percent of visitors decided not to respond. About one-third of people were actually satisfied, while about half of the number of satisfied visitors were very satisfied.

After refurbishment, the dissatisfaction fell to around 15 percent, and very dissatisfaction became half of the prior. Number of people of no response remained the same as before, and the satisfied visitors number increase to 40 percent and very satisfied increase to 35 percent, which is a huge jump from prior.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the main features and give a clear overview: visitor numbers rose from 74,000 to 92,000, while satisfaction improved and dissatisfaction declined. Most reported figures are accurate, including the unchanged 5% with no response and the fall in very dissatisfied visitors from 10% to 5%. This meets the task well, though some comparisons are less fully explained. For example, the overview could state that satisfied or very satisfied responses together rose from 45% to 75%, making the overall shift especially clear. Also, “about half of the number of satisfied visitors were very satisfied” is an awkward comparison: the chart shows 15% very satisfied, not half of the 30% satisfied group. A more precise summary of the categories would strengthen the response further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction, a brief overview, and separate descriptions of the two periods. This makes the before-and-after comparison easy to follow. However, the overview is quite general, and the body paragraphs mostly list figures rather than grouping related changes into a clear comparison. Some linking and referencing are also awkward, such as “the satisfaction level increased, in marked contrast to dissatisfaction” and “half of the prior,” which require the reader to infer exactly what is being compared. Improve progression by grouping the positive responses together, then contrasting them with the declining negative responses, and use explicit references such as “the proportion of very dissatisfied visitors.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “refurbishment,” “dissatisfied,” “satisfied,” and “increased,” and the meaning is generally understandable. There is some variety in describing change, but several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural: “satisfaction on the refurbishment,” “very dissatisfaction,” and “the satisfied visitors number increase” do not express the intended ideas naturally. “Portion” is also imprecise when referring to survey percentages, and “huge jump” is informal for an academic report. Aim for accurate chart language and consistent use of terms such as “proportion,” “share,” “rose,” and “fell.” These improvements would make the description more precise and appropriately formal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of sentence forms, including a complex overview with “whereas,” and most of the message remains understandable. However, some grammatical errors recur and occasionally make relationships between figures unclear. For example, “the satisfied visitors number increase to 40 percent” has an incorrect verb form and word order; “very dissatisfaction became half of the prior” also has a faulty noun form and an incomplete comparison. In “Before refurbishment, the numbers were 74,000,” the plural subject is unclear because the figure refers to the total number of visitors. Check subject–verb agreement, articles, and complete comparison structures. More consistently accurate sentences, alongside the complex forms you attempt, would improve control.

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