Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

This pie chart distributes many visitors of ashdown museum before and after the years of it getting refurbished.

Overall it can be seen that mostly people came after it got refurbished side by side satisfaction also increased and dissatisfied people also started to decrease where as proportion for satisfied and very satisfied people arose.

During the years before refurbishment ashdown museum experienced 74,000 people and 92,000 after it got refurbished. In terms of satisfaction 30% people were satisfied and very satisfied were 15%. Furthermore mostly people were dissatisfied 40% and very dissatisfied were 10% and 5% of people did not gave response.

After the refurbishment the number of people increased so did the percentage, as for the satisfaction 40% of the people were satisfied and very satisfied were 35%. Number of people who were not satisfied decreased to 15% and very dissatisfied was 5% furthermore same 5% people did not gave any response which remained unchanged.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You cover both the visitor totals and the satisfaction results, and the main comparisons are accurate: attendance rose from 74,000 to 92,000, while satisfaction increased and dissatisfaction declined. Your overview identifies these broad trends, and the response includes the key percentages for both periods. This gives the report a clear, relevant account of the data. To make the coverage more fully developed, state the most striking category changes explicitly in the overview—for example, that “very satisfied” rose from 15% to 35%, while “dissatisfied” fell from 40% to 15%. Also avoid the vague claim that “mostly people came” after refurbishment; the figures show an increase, but not that most visitors came in that period.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and separate descriptions of the before- and after-refurbishment figures. This makes the comparison easy to follow. However, some linking is mechanical or unclear. “Furthermore” is used to add figures that are better presented as a direct comparison, and “After the refurbishment the number of people increased so did the percentage” does not clearly specify which percentage is meant. The overview also combines several trends in one long sentence. Use clearer transitions such as “By contrast” for the fall in dissatisfaction, and group related figures together so the progression between attendance and survey results is more controlled.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “refurbishment,” “satisfaction,” “dissatisfied,” and “proportion,” so the reader can understand the main subject and comparisons. However, the range is limited and several expressions are imprecise or unnatural, such as “distributes many visitors,” “side by side satisfaction,” and “people who were not satisfied.” Repetition of “people” and “increased” also reduces precision. Choose standard chart-reporting collocations and distinguish clearly between visitor numbers and survey percentages. More accurate wording would make the account sound more formal and help express the data without relying on broad or conversational phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some complex sentences, particularly in the overview and in the final comparison, but the range is limited and errors recur. For example, “mostly people came after it got refurbished side by side satisfaction also increased” lacks clear sentence structure and punctuation. In “5% of people did not gave response,” the verb form is incorrect; “did not give a response” is needed. There are also problems with articles and sentence construction in “During the years before refurbishment ashdown museum experienced 74,000 people.” Use complete, clearly punctuated sentences and check verb forms after auxiliaries. More consistent control of these basic patterns would make your comparisons easier to read.

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