Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table and the pie charts show information about visitors to Ashdown Museum in the year before and after its refurbished.

Overall, the number of visitors increased after the year of refurbishment. The proportion of the satisfied visitors had also increased. The ratio of dissatisfied decreased after the refurbishment.

In the year before the refurbishment, only 15% of visitors were very satisfied and 30% of visitors were satisfied. These both features

were increased after the year of refurbishment. It was increased to 35% and 40% respectively. There was a dramatic changed in the proportion of the dissatisfaction of the visitors. It was 40% and it least to only 15% in the year after refurbishment.

Only 10% of visitors were very satisfied in the year before refurbishment and just 5% visitors gave no response about the Ashdown Museum. After the refurbishment, 5% of visitors were very satisfied and the same proportion was for the visitors who gave no response.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main overall changes: visitor numbers rose, satisfaction improved, and dissatisfaction fell. You also report several key figures accurately, including the increases in satisfied and very satisfied visitors from 30% and 15% to 40% and 35%, and the fall in dissatisfied visitors from 40% to 15%. However, the final paragraph misreports the data: before refurbishment, 10% were very dissatisfied, not very satisfied; after refurbishment, 5% were very dissatisfied, while very satisfied reached 35%. The response also omits the visitor totals of 74,000 and 92,000, and does not clearly cover the very dissatisfied category. Selecting and comparing all major features accurately would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview, and detail paragraphs, and the overview helps the reader see the broad direction of change. However, the progression within the details is not consistently clear: the final paragraph begins with “Only 10%” but then incorrectly labels this group as very satisfied, making the comparison difficult to follow. Some linking is also repetitive or awkward, such as “These both features were increased” and “After the refurbishment.” Organise the figures by satisfaction category, and use clear comparisons between the two years within each category. This would strengthen the progression and make the relationships between details easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary such as “proportion,” “satisfied,” “dissatisfied,” and “increased,” so the topic is generally clear. There is some attempt to vary expression, for example “dramatic changed,” but several word-form and collocation choices are inaccurate or unnatural: “after its refurbished,” “These both features,” and “It was 40% and it least to only 15%.” These errors sometimes make the intended meaning less clear, particularly in the final comparison. Aim for precise chart language and check whether a noun, adjective, or verb is needed. For example, use “after it was refurbished,” “both figures rose,” and “fell to 15%” to express the trends naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You communicate the broad comparisons using mostly simple sentences, and the overview is understandable. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors occur frequently in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction. Examples include “after its refurbished,” “These both features were increased,” and “There was a dramatic changed”; these should be recast with accurate forms such as “after it was refurbished,” “Both figures increased,” and “There was a dramatic change.” The sentence “It was 40% and it least to only 15%” also has faulty structure and verb form. Practise combining accurate simple comparisons with a few controlled complex sentences.

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