Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie graph illustrates the consuquences of surveys of visitor satisfaction in Ashdown Museum over the same period.

Overall, satisfaction ratio becomes increasing after refurbishment year. However, it delays before rebuilt this structure.While moderate dissatisfied proportion also significant in prevoious year with campared to latest year.

First and foremost, certain individuals in former times is less satiasfied at 15. A moderate amount of people who agree this management for about 30. A significant proportion of people who are dissatisfied with this accomodation are equal to 40. While, very few who does not response on this.

Secondly, a large difference is seen in other pie chart that really opposite to the previous one. Satisfaction ratio to a great extent is rocketed in this graphic to the 40 . While, some people who argue that we does not agree this and thi is in 15 in amount. Moreover,many people who say that we are satisfied.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the broad contrast between the two survey years and report several relevant figures, including 30% satisfied and 40% dissatisfied before refurbishment, and 40% satisfied and 15% dissatisfied afterwards. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: satisfaction did not simply “become increasing”; the combined satisfied share rose from 45% to 75%, while dissatisfaction fell from 50% to 20%. The visitor totals, 74,000 and 92,000, are omitted, and the after-refurbishment account leaves out the 35% who were very satisfied. Some descriptions, such as “certain individuals … at 15,” do not clearly identify the category. To make the report more complete, give a precise overview and compare the main categories and visitor totals using accurate labels.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is a basic structure: an introduction, an attempted overview, and two paragraphs that appear to describe the two survey years. Phrases such as “First and foremost” and “Secondly” signal movement between points. However, progression is not consistently clear because the overview contains fragmented or confusing statements, including “it delays before rebuilt this structure,” and the final paragraph ends without completing its comparison. Several linking words, especially “While” and “Moreover,” do not connect the ideas accurately, and references such as “this” and “this graphic” are vague. Organise the body around clear before-and-after comparisons, and use transitions only where they express the relationship between the figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of vocabulary, including “significant proportion,” “moderate amount,” and “rocketed,” and the reader can recognise that the response concerns satisfaction levels. However, word choice and spelling errors are frequent enough to make some points difficult to interpret. Examples include “consuquences,” “satiasfied,” “accomodation,” and “prevoious”; “satisfaction ratio” is also an imprecise phrase for survey percentages, while “rocketed” is too informal for an academic report. Some expressions, such as “people who agree this management,” do not convey the intended survey category clearly. Use the chart’s labels—“very satisfied,” “satisfied,” and “dissatisfied”—and practise accurate spelling and natural collocations for describing proportions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast introduced by “While” and a relative clause in “people who are dissatisfied.” However, many sentences contain errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, or sentence construction, which sometimes obscure the meaning. For example, “satisfaction ratio becomes increasing” has an incorrect verb pattern, and “certain individuals in former times is less satisfied” has problems with tense and agreement. “While, very few who does not response on this” is not a complete, well-formed sentence. Build reliable simple sentences first, such as “The proportion who were satisfied rose after refurbishment,” then add subordinate clauses carefully. Check subject–verb agreement and ensure each sentence has a complete main clause.

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