Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table below illustrates the numbers of visitors a year before and after the refurbishing of Ashdown museum .The charts present the result of surveys by the tourists.

Overall, there is an increase in the numbers of tourists after refurbishing the museum. Satisfaction level of people rose, while unsatisfaction level fell down. Moreover numbers of people for no response remained same.

Before refurbishment, 40 people were dissatisfied which declined to 15 people whereas 30 people were satisfied , which inclined to 40 people.

Additionally, level for very satisfied rose to 35 people from 15 people , whereas for very dissatisfaction fell down to 5 people from 10 people .while people who did not repond remained same 5

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the main overall trends accurately: visitor numbers increased after refurbishment, satisfaction improved, and the no-response share stayed unchanged. You also report the key survey figures correctly, including dissatisfied visitors falling from 40 to 15 and very satisfied visitors rising from 15 to 35. However, the response does not give either total visitor figure (74,000 and 92,000), and the survey results are described as numbers of people rather than percentages. The overview and comparisons are relevant, but the report is underdeveloped and does not fully summarise the table and charts. It is also 33 words below the required minimum. Include the visitor totals and clarify that the survey figures are percentages, then add a little more comparison.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and details comparing the survey results. This makes the main message reasonably easy to follow. Linking words such as “Overall,” “whereas,” and “Additionally” help connect contrasts, and the figures are generally grouped by satisfaction category. However, the final paragraph is compressed into a long sequence of comparisons, and the ending lacks clear punctuation, so the progression becomes less controlled. Some linking is also mechanical, with repeated “whereas” constructions. Separate the details into clearer sentences and use a more deliberate order—for example, report the visitor totals first, then compare positive and negative satisfaction responses.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “refurbishment,” “satisfaction,” “dissatisfied,” and “remained same,” so the topic is clear. There is some range in the language used to describe change, but several choices are inaccurate or unnatural: “unsatisfaction level,” “inclined to 40,” and “fell down” do not express the trends idiomatically. “Tourists” is also less precise than “visitors” for the chart, and “people” is repeated where the data are percentages. Spelling errors such as “repond” and inconsistent capitalisation reduce accuracy. Aim for standard reporting phrases such as “the proportion of visitors who were satisfied rose” and check spelling and word forms before finishing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple statements and longer comparisons, and the overall meaning can usually be understood. However, some sentence structures and punctuation are not controlled consistently. For example, the opening runs two clauses together after “museum,” and the final sentence begins “while” after a full stop but has no clear ending. There are also issues with articles and number forms in phrases such as “the numbers of tourists” and “40 people were dissatisfied,” where the chart reports percentages rather than counts. Use complete, clearly punctuated sentences and check agreement and article use. A wider range of accurately formed comparison sentences would make the report easier to read.

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