Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The table compares the number of tourists before the renovation of museum and after, while the pie charts provide the information about the survey of visitors satisfaction.

Overall, it is apparent there is significant increase in number of tourists after the refurbishment of museum. However, after the refurbishment of museum the satisfaction of tourists improved.

Before the renovation of Ashdown museum there are 74,000 visitors visited this museum, after the refurbishment of museum the number of tourists increase to 92,000. According to survey, the number of very satisfied vsistors accounts for 15%, while the proportion of satisfied visitors were double than very satisfied. However, the percentage of dissatisfied visitors accounted for 40%, and very dissatisfied tourists percentage are 10%.

After the museum refurbishment the peorportion of very satisfied visitors increased to 35% and 10% increase in satisfied visitors. However, the percentage of dissatisfied visitors dropped to 15% after the renovation of museum according to survey. Similarly, the proportion very dissatisfied and no response of visitors on the reconstruction of Ashdown museum reach to 5%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the main elements of the task: visitor numbers rose from 74,000 to 92,000, and the survey results shifted towards greater satisfaction after refurbishment. The overview identifies both broad trends, while the body includes relevant percentages, such as 40% dissatisfied before and 15% afterwards. This gives the response a clear, relevant account, although some comparisons are less fully explained. For example, saying satisfaction improved would be stronger if you explicitly compared the combined satisfied categories across the two years. Also, “10% increase in satisfied visitors” is ambiguous: the figure rose from 30% to 40%, a rise of 10 percentage points. Clarifying this distinction and summarising the overall change in satisfaction more precisely would make the key features more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the two periods. This makes the before-and-after comparison easy to follow, and linking words such as “Overall,” “However,” and “Similarly” help signal relationships between points. Some cohesion is mechanical or imprecise, however. “However” is used repeatedly where a straightforward addition or contrast would be clearer, and the final sentence combines the very dissatisfied and no-response figures without clearly distinguishing them. Repeated references to “after the refurbishment of museum” also make the progression less smooth. Use clearer referencing, such as “the following year,” and group the satisfaction categories into meaningful comparisons to improve flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “refurbishment,” “proportion,” “survey,” and “dissatisfied,” and the meaning is generally understandable. However, the range and control are uneven, with noticeable spelling and word-choice problems. “Tourists” is not the most accurate term for people visiting a museum, and “the peorportion” and “vsistors” are misspelled. Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “the number of very satisfied visitors accounts for 15%” and “on the reconstruction of Ashdown museum.” Prefer precise chart language such as “accounted for” or “made up,” and use “visitors” consistently. More accurate collocations and careful proofreading would make your vocabulary more natural and precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “while” and “However,” and the main comparisons can usually be understood. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly with articles, agreement, and verb forms. For example, “before the renovation of museum” needs an article, while “the number of tourists increase” should use a past-tense verb to match the period described. In “the proportion of satisfied visitors were double,” the subject and verb do not agree, and “the proportion very dissatisfied” is missing a grammatical link. These errors do not generally prevent understanding, but they reduce accuracy. Practise checking each sentence for a clear subject, a correctly formed verb, and complete noun phrases.

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