Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given table chart depicts how many people visitors Ashdown Museum during the year before and after its refurbishment and pie charts illustrate results of visitors satisfaction.

Looking at the charts for more detail, during the year before refurbishment of Ashdown Museum, 74,000 people preferred to visit the museum. 15% people very satisfied visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before its refurbishment, whereas 5% people did not give any response. The number of visitors who were dissatisfied was 40%, which was the highest. On the other hand, 30% people satisfied visitors to Ashdown Museum and 10% people very dissatisfied visitors to Ashdown Museum.

In addition, during the year after refurbishment of Ashdown Museum, 92,000 people agree to visit the Museum. 35% people very satisfied visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year after its refurbishment, whereas, 5% people give not response. Whereas, 40% was highest people satisfied visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year after its refurbishment and other side only 5% people visitors to Ashdown Museum, which was lowest. whereas, 15% people dissatisfied visitors to Ashdown Museum.

In conclusion, both side 5% people not interest to response.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You report the main figures accurately: visitors rose from 74,000 to 92,000, and the satisfaction percentages for both years are generally correct. You also identify the largest categories in each period and note that non-response remained at 5%. However, the response is only partly effective as a summary because it lacks a clear overview of the main change: satisfaction improved markedly after refurbishment, while dissatisfaction fell. Some descriptions are unclear, such as saying visitors “preferred to visit” or “agree to visit,” which does not accurately explain what the visitor totals represent. The conclusion repeats one detail rather than summarising the overall pattern. Add a concise overview comparing visitor numbers and the shift from dissatisfaction to satisfaction.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure, with an opening, separate paragraphs for the two years, and a concluding sentence. This makes the information reasonably easy to locate. However, progression is limited because the figures are mostly listed one after another rather than organised around the key comparison between the periods. Linking expressions such as “In addition,” “On the other hand,” and repeated uses of “whereas” are sometimes mechanical or do not clearly show the relationship between ideas. The final “In conclusion” sentence introduces no overall synthesis. Group the positive and negative satisfaction results, then compare how each changed after refurbishment; use fewer, more precise transitions and clearer references to the two periods.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “refurbishment,” “dissatisfied,” and “response,” so the topic is generally identifiable. However, the range is limited and several repeated or inaccurate phrases make the report less natural. For example, “people preferred to visit” and “people agree to visit” do not express visitor totals appropriately, while “people satisfied visitors” is an awkward construction repeated throughout. “Other side” is also an imprecise way to introduce a contrast. Aim for accurate collocations and vary the language used to describe proportions and changes. More precise choices such as “visitor numbers,” “accounted for,” and “the proportion of dissatisfied visitors fell” would make the comparisons clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer sentences using contrast clauses, for example, “15% people very satisfied … whereas 5% people did not give any response,” but these structures are often faulty. There are repeated problems with articles, sentence structure, and missing verbs: “15% people very satisfied visitors” needs a construction such as “15% of visitors were very satisfied.” The opening phrase “how many people visitors” is also grammatically incomplete, and punctuation around “whereas” is inconsistent. Most sentences follow a similar simple pattern, so the range is limited. Practise building accurate comparison sentences with “the proportion of visitors who…” and check that each clause has a clear subject and verb.

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