Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table illustrates the number of visitors visit in Ashdown Museum during the year befor and after refurbished. The two pie charts show the result survey asking tourists how they satisfied during the year before and the year after refurbished.

Overall, it can be clearly seen that the number of visitors increased after the refurbishment. Another noticeable point is that visitor were satisfied after the refurbishment contributed the largest portion whereas the number of visitors were very dissatisfied accounted for the smallest figure.

In terms the number of visitors the year before refurbishment accountedfor 74,000, which was rose significantly after the refurbishment at 92,000.

On the other hand the number of visitors the year before refurbishment, visitors were dissatisfied accounted for the largest proportion at 40%, followed by visitors were satisfied at 30%. Together, these two feelings made up 70% which was more than half of totalsatisfiction. Visitors were very satisfied made up 15%, which was 5% higher than visitors very dissatisfied at 10% and no response made up 5%.

By contrast the number of visitors year the after refurbishment, visitors were satisfied represented the largest proportion at 40%, followed by visitors were satisfied at 35%. Together, these two satisfiction accounted for 75% which was more than half of total satisfiction. The visitors were very dissatisfied and no response represented a similar figures at 5% and very dssatisfied made up 15%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the main elements of the task: visitor numbers rose from 74,000 to 92,000, and you compare satisfaction results before and after refurbishment. Your overview identifies the increase in attendance and the shift towards greater satisfaction. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate. After refurbishment, 35% were very satisfied and 40% satisfied, but you describe the 35% group as “satisfied” again. You also call the 5% no-response and 5% very-dissatisfied figures similar, then repeat that very dissatisfied was 15%; the latter figure is actually dissatisfied. The overview would be stronger if it clearly stated that dissatisfaction fell overall and satisfaction rose, while distinguishing the two satisfaction categories accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the visitor total and survey results. Phrases such as “Overall” and “By contrast” help signal the direction of the discussion. However, some linking and referencing are mechanical or confusing. For example, “On the other hand” does not clearly introduce a contrast in the paragraph about the first survey, and the repeated phrase “visitors were satisfied” makes the after-refurbishment comparison difficult to follow. The sentence beginning “Together, these two feelings” also relies on an unclear reference. Use more precise links and name each category explicitly so readers can follow the comparisons without having to infer what “these two” refers to.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “refurbishment,” “proportion,” “accounted for,” and “represented,” and you attempt to vary how figures are described. However, noticeable word-choice, collocation, and spelling problems limit precision. “The number of visitors visit” is not a natural way to describe the table, while “how they satisfied” should refer to how satisfied visitors were. There are also misspellings such as “befor,” “satisfiction,” and “dssatisfied,” which reduce the accuracy and polish of the report. Some expressions, including “Together, these two feelings,” are vague for chart reporting. Build a reliable set of collocations for describing percentages and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including relative clauses and comparisons, as in “which was 5% higher than…” and “which was rose significantly.” Some sentences communicate the intended figures, but grammatical errors recur in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction. For example, “which was rose” combines incompatible verb forms; “visitor were satisfied” has incorrect subject–verb agreement; and “In terms the number” is missing a preposition. The long sentence beginning “On the other hand the number of visitors…” is also structurally difficult to parse. Practise forming concise comparison sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and verb forms when revising.

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