Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

After looking in the graph of the meseum before refurbishment and after refurbishment i can the total numbers of visitors vist. After the refurbishment meseum made most of it for the visitors as it is visible the the total number of visirtors clearly after the refurbishment is ahead as with the result of 92000 vistors came after refurbishment and before the refurbishment 74000 people visited. So before the the refurbishment the very satified visitors was 15 percent and after the refurbishment it was 35 percent clear look like meseum made extra effort on it. But the decline in satified was seen as it was dropped down from 10 percent to 5 percent after refurbishment, and good point where museum will be happy as a clear drop in the percentage of dissatisfied from 40 percent to 15 after refurbishment, A small change in very dissatified dropped from 10 percent to 5 percent, a good point for the meusem, Although no repsone was same and haven't change neighter before the refurbishment and after refurbishment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You report the main visitor total accurately, noting the rise from 74,000 to 92,000, and identify important changes in satisfaction: very satisfied responses increased from 15% to 35%, while dissatisfied responses fell from 40% to 15%. You also mention that no response remained at 5%. These are relevant comparisons and show coverage of both the table and charts. However, one figure is misreported: the satisfied category rose from 30% to 40%, rather than falling from 10% to 5%; those figures belong to very dissatisfied responses. The response also lacks a clear, separate overview of the dominant trends, and some comments about the museum’s efforts are speculative. State the overall pattern first, then report each category accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response follows a broadly sensible order, moving from visitor totals to survey results, and uses contrast markers such as “before,” “after,” “but” and “although.” This gives the reader some sense of comparison. However, the information is presented as one long paragraph, with no clear overview separated from supporting details. Several ideas run together in lengthy sentences, especially the discussion beginning “So before the refurbishment,” and repeated references to “after refurbishment” make progression feel mechanical. Some links are also unclear: “But the decline in satisfied” does not connect logically to the figures that follow. Group the overall trends in an opening overview, then use a separate paragraph for the figures and clear category-by-category comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “total number of visitors,” “percentage,” “dissatisfied” and “no response,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “made most of it for the visitors” is unclear, and “the decline in satified” does not accurately describe the rise in the satisfied category. There are also repeated spelling errors in words such as “meseum,” “vistors,” “satified” and “dissatisfied.” Use precise chart language such as “accounted for,” “increased,” and “fell,” and check spelling carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a comparison with “as” and a concessive clause beginning “Although.” However, control is uneven, and several sentences contain errors in structure, articles, agreement or punctuation. For example, “After looking in the graph … i can the total numbers” is not a complete, correctly formed sentence, while “the total number of visirtors clearly after the refurbishment is ahead” has an awkward structure. The final sentence beginning “Although no repsone was same” is also incomplete as written. Use straightforward, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and separate comparisons with full stops. Check articles and verb forms, for example, “the percentage of visitors who were dissatisfied fell.”

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