Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before refurbishment is 74,000. The visitors satisfaction during this survey before refurbishment is 15% visitors are very satisfied. The remaining visitors which have 5% satisfied and 30% is very dissatisfied and 40% visitors have no response. But the visitors to Ashdown Museum before the tower of refurbishment is 92,000. The results of this survey is improved. The number of visitors who is very satisfied after this survey is 35%. The visitors who is dissatisfied of this survey is 15%. And the visitors who is very dissatisfied of this survey is 40%. And the 5% visitors who is not responding on that survey. The difference between the year before refurbishment and year after refurbishment is that the visitors who is very satisfied respond is better in after refurbishment and satisfied respond is better in after refurbishment but in dissatisfied response is also more in after refurbishment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the visitor totals correctly (74,000 before and 92,000 after) and note that satisfaction improved in some respects. However, several survey figures are misreported: before refurbishment, 30% were satisfied and 10% very dissatisfied, not 5% and 30%; after refurbishment, 40% were satisfied and 5% very dissatisfied, not 40% very dissatisfied. You also say dissatisfaction was higher after refurbishment, although the dissatisfied share fell from 40% to 15%. These errors obscure the main pattern, and the response gives little accurate overview of the survey results. It is also four words below the required 150-word minimum. Report the key shifts accurately and summarise the overall improvement before adding details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response follows a basic before-and-after order, so the reader can see that you are comparing the two periods. However, ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs or a well-developed overview followed by supporting details. Repeated openings such as “The visitors…” and “The number of visitors…” make the account feel like a list, while “But” does not clearly signal the relationship between the figures. The final comparison repeats earlier points and includes a contradictory claim about dissatisfaction. Group the visitor totals and the main satisfaction changes, use clear paragraphing, and connect comparisons with precise linking phrases such as “by contrast” or “while.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant basic terms, including “refurbishment,” “visitors,” “satisfied,” and “dissatisfied,” and the reader can generally identify the topic of each sentence. However, the vocabulary is repetitive and some combinations are unnatural or unclear, such as “visitors satisfaction,” “very satisfied respond,” and “not responding on that survey.” The repeated use of “survey” and “visitors” also limits variety. Choose precise terms for the chart categories and describe proportions directly—for example, “the proportion of visitors who were satisfied.” More accurate collocations would make the comparisons easier to understand without requiring a wider or overly complex vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Most sentences use simple present-tense patterns, and you attempt some longer constructions, such as “The difference between the year before refurbishment and year after refurbishment is that…”. However, these longer sentences are often faulty, and errors in agreement and sentence structure occur frequently. For example, “The visitors who is very satisfied” has incorrect subject–verb agreement, while “15% visitors are very satisfied” is missing a grammatical link between the percentage and the people. Several sentences begin with “And,” and the final comparison is difficult to follow because its clauses are not controlled clearly. Practise accurate percentage constructions and build comparisons with complete, well-punctuated clauses.

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