Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table illustrate the proportion of the total visitors to Ashdown Museum before and after reconstructed, and also the pie charts depict that the survey which was taken from the public people.

Overall, it is quite apparent that dissatisfied have the majority of voting in prior refurbishment and least proportion exhibits in no response. Whereas, after complete the refurbishment constuction, satisfied is dominating the highest proprotion.

In a detailed view, before the refurbishment the number of people visited to ashdown museum, at 74,000. while the main people took survey about the musuem from the individuals, 40% of visitors are dissatisfied with the view, followed by very dissatisfied, which represented 30%, Moreover satified and very satisfied made at 10% and 15%.

Probing further, after the alteration done, the satified people had the largest voting, at 40%. followed by very satisfied took at 35%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the broad contrast: dissatisfaction was more common before refurbishment, while satisfaction increased afterwards. However, the report is only partial and contains important data errors. Before refurbishment, 40% were dissatisfied, but the very dissatisfied figure was 10%, not 30%; satisfaction was 30% and 15%, not 10% and 15%. You also omit the after-refurbishment visitor total of 92,000 and most of the survey figures, including the fall in dissatisfaction to 15% and very dissatisfaction to 5%. The overview’s claim that satisfaction dominated afterwards is relevant, but the comparison needs accurate supporting details. The response is also 8 words below the required minimum. Include the key figures for both periods and check them against the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs describing the periods. This makes the main direction of the comparison reasonably easy to follow. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Whereas,” and “Probing further” help signal shifts, although some are used mechanically or do not connect ideas smoothly. For example, “Whereas” begins a fragment-like contrast, and “In a detailed view” is an awkward transition into the figures. The final paragraph is also incomplete as a comparison because it gives only two after-refurbishment categories and does not return to visitor totals. Develop each period in a parallel way and use clear references to connect the figures and comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “dissatisfied,” “refurbishment,” and “dominating,” so the reader can generally identify the topic and intended comparisons. However, inaccurate word choice, collocation, and spelling are noticeable and sometimes make the meaning less clear. “Reconstructed” does not describe the museum’s refurbishment, “public people” is unnatural, and “largest voting” is unsuitable for survey results. There are also repeated misspellings, including “musuem,” “satified,” “proprotion,” and “constuction.” Aim for precise chart language such as “the percentage of visitors,” “survey respondents,” and “accounted for,” and proofread carefully. This would make the limited range more reliable and easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast introduced by “Whereas” and a participial phrase in “followed by very dissatisfied.” However, control is inconsistent, and several sentence structures are faulty. “The table illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, while “before the refurbishment the number of people visited” lacks a grammatical construction for describing the visitors. The sentence beginning “while the main people took survey” is difficult to follow, and “after complete the refurbishment” does not form a correct clause. Punctuation also creates fragments, such as “while the main people…” after a full stop. Practise complete clauses with accurate verb forms and articles, and use shorter sentences when reporting several figures.

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