Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The table charts compares the numbers of visitors visit to Ashdown Museum during the year when it was refurbished before and after and asking them that they are satisfied with the visit during the both periods.
Overall, the number of satisfaction and very satisfaction has rised significantly after the refurnishment while dissatifaction has instant drop from 40 to 15. In addition, very dissatisfaction has slightly drop whereas no response remain same.
Firstly, Satisfied and Very satisfied has been increased from 30 to 40 and 15 to 35 respectively after the refurnishment. Dissatisfied has drastic fall which is 40 during the year before refurnishment and 15 after the year refurnishment.
Very Dissatisfied has also slightly drop which is 10 during the year before refurnish and 5 after the year refurnish. However, no response seems to be remain constant as it is 5 on the year before refurnishment and after the refurnishment.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
You report several key survey changes accurately: satisfaction rose (30% to 40%), very high satisfaction increased (15% to 35%), and dissatisfaction fell (40% to 15%). You also note that the “no response” figure stayed at 5%. However, the task includes visitor totals, which are not mentioned: attendance increased from 74,000 to 92,000, an important overall feature. Your overview focuses on satisfaction categories but does not summarise this rise in visitors, and the response mainly lists figures rather than selecting and comparing the most significant patterns. Include both the attendance trend and the shift from predominantly dissatisfied responses to predominantly satisfied ones to address the task more fully.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs describing the survey results. Sequencing words such as “Overall,” “Firstly,” and “However” help signal the stages of your account, and the reader can follow the comparisons. Some linking is mechanical, though, and the final two paragraphs repeat the same category-by-category pattern without developing a broader comparison. The opening sentence is also difficult to follow, which weakens the transition into the overview. A more direct introduction followed by one paragraph comparing positive responses with negative responses would create smoother progression and reduce repetition.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use relevant task vocabulary, including “satisfaction,” “dissatisfaction,” “increased,” “fall,” and “remain constant,” so the main trends are generally understandable. However, several inaccurate word forms, spelling errors, and collocations make the language noticeably imprecise: “refurnishment,” “dissatifaction,” “very satisfaction,” and “drastic fall” are examples. “The number of satisfaction” is also an unnatural way to describe survey percentages. Use terms such as “proportion of visitors,” “very satisfied,” and “a sharp decline,” and check spelling carefully. Greater accuracy with these common chart-description expressions would make your comparisons clearer and more natural.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple statements and longer structures, including “Overall … while …” and “However, no response seems to be remain constant.” This shows some effort to vary sentence forms, but errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction are frequent enough to affect clarity. For example, “The table charts compares” has an incorrect subject–verb relationship, while “Satisfied and Very satisfied has been increased” should use a plural subject and a more suitable verb form. In “seems to be remain constant,” the verb pattern is faulty. Practise building accurate comparison sentences, such as “The proportions of satisfied and very satisfied visitors increased,” before adding more complex clauses.
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