Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given plan shows information about the satisfaction of people visited to Ashdown museum during the year before and after redevelopment.

In genera, it can be clearly seen that majority of people visited the year after refurbishment and many visitors were dissatisfied before refurfishment, while satisfied visitors were made the highest share after refurbishment.

Looking at the plan in more detail, visitors made the highest at 92,000 by visiting to museun after refurbishment, although 74,000 were visited before refurbishment. 40 visitors were dissatisfied with their visit before refurbishment, dissatisaction was reduced by 15 people after development and the same number of people were satisfied after redevelopment, even 30 visitors were not satisfied before refurbishment.

What is more, the number of no responced visitors were same by 5 visitors, while very dissatisfied were decline from 10 to 5. Very satisfied visitors were 15 before refurbishment, even though 20 visitors were increased after redevelopment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the main direction of change: total attendance rose from 74,000 to 92,000, and dissatisfaction fell after refurbishment. You also include several relevant survey figures, such as the unchanged 5% giving no response and the fall in very dissatisfied visitors from 10% to 5%. However, the overview is not fully clear, and some comparisons are inaccurate or confusing: 40% were dissatisfied before refurbishment, but this fell to 15% after; the response says “the same number” were satisfied after, without clearly identifying the 40% figure. The increase in very satisfied visitors was 20 percentage points, not 20 visitors. The response is also 6 words below the 150-word minimum, with 8 words copied from the prompt excluded from the count. Develop the overview and report percentages precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs of details. This gives the reader some organisation, and phrases such as “Looking at the plan in more detail” and “What is more” signal movement between points. However, progression within the detail paragraphs is uneven: visitor totals, dissatisfaction, and satisfaction are combined in a long sentence, making comparisons difficult to follow. Some linking expressions are awkward or do not clearly show the relationship between figures, particularly “even” in the final sentence. Referencing is also unclear in phrases such as “the same number of people.” Group the satisfaction results by before/after period or by positive and negative responses, and use direct comparisons to make the sequence easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “refurbishment,” “dissatisfied,” “satisfied,” and “reduced,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range and control are limited, with repeated use of “visitors” and “refurbishment” and several inaccurate or misspelled forms that make the report less clear. Examples include “In genera,” “refurfishment,” “museun,” “dissatisaction,” and “responced.” Some collocations are also unnatural, such as “people visited to Ashdown museum” and “visitors were made the highest.” Use standard chart-reporting phrases such as “the proportion of visitors,” “attendance,” and “accounted for,” and check spelling and word forms carefully. This would make the comparisons more precise and easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “although” and a clause beginning “while.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to interpret. For example, “people visited the year after refurbishment” lacks a clear grammatical construction, while “40 visitors were dissatisfied” incorrectly presents a percentage as a count. In “the number of no responced visitors were same,” the subject and verb do not agree, and the article is missing. The sentence beginning “What is more” also has an unclear structure. Practise accurate patterns such as “The proportion who were dissatisfied fell from 40% to 15%” and check agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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