Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the table chat seen as thetotal number of visitors to ashdown museum and results of surveys of visitor satisfaction.

this two chats two different data firts before year refurbished and after year refurbishment expereniced by both.

firstly i talk about the before year refurbishment there are five different data the very satisfied is about 15 back one is satisfied is less than one about 10 dissatified is very high its 40 and very dissatified is slighty into dissatified 30 the no respone is down weak it 5. on the other hand year after refurbishment there the data is totally different the peak point rato is 40 it very dissatisfied drop to dissatisfied to 30 very satisfied and the dissatisfied is the half of very satisfied the remaine is satisfied and not respone is equal its 5 percent.

durning the two different data before year the total visitors is 74000 furthermore the dissatisfied is about 40 percent. however after year the visitors increase it 92000 thousand as well as very satisfied is full.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the main subjects and include the visitor totals, correctly noting that attendance rose from 74,000 to 92,000. You also recognise that dissatisfaction was prominent before refurbishment and that satisfaction improved afterwards. However, several survey figures are misreported or unclear: before refurbishment, 30% were satisfied and 10% very dissatisfied, while your account appears to reverse these; after refurbishment, 35% were very satisfied and 15% dissatisfied, not 40% and 30%. The overview is also not clearly stated, and the final phrase “very satisfied is full” does not accurately describe the data. To strengthen the response, give a concise overview of the rise in attendance and the shift from dissatisfaction to satisfaction, then report the key percentages accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response by discussing the period before refurbishment and then the period after it, with linking phrases such as “firstly” and “on the other hand.” This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, the ideas within each section are difficult to follow because several figures and categories are combined in unclear sentences, such as “the very satisfied is about 15 back one is satisfied is less than one about 10.” The final paragraph repeats information rather than providing a clear summary. Use separate, logically ordered paragraphs for an overview and the main comparisons, and connect each percentage directly to its satisfaction category.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “visitors,” “survey,” “satisfied,” “dissatisfied,” and “increase,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and frequent spelling and word-choice problems make parts of the report hard to understand, for example “chat” for chart, “dissatified,” and “respone.” Phrases such as “peak point rato” and “full” are not suitable or clear descriptions of the figures. Aim for accurate, standard terms and simple collocations for describing data; precision is more useful here than trying to use complicated expressions. For example, describe a percentage as “accounted for” or say that a figure “rose” or “fell.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to form longer sentences and make comparisons, including with “on the other hand” and “however,” but sentence structures are often faulty and meaning is sometimes difficult to recover. Examples include “this two chats two different data” and “the visitors increase it 92000 thousand,” where articles, verb forms, and sentence construction are not controlled. Punctuation and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, so several ideas run together. Build accuracy first with clear subject–verb sentences, such as “Visitor numbers increased from 74,000 to 92,000.” Then add comparisons using a reliable pattern: “The proportion who were satisfied rose from 30% to 40%.”

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