Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The provided data gives the information about how many people visit the Ashdown museum and result of survey which elaborate the satisfaction experience level of two years before and after the refurbishment.

Overall, more people visited after the refurbishment of the museum and most of the people were satisfied, however in initial year dissatisfied people were at maximum number.

In initial year, total number of visitors were less than the visitors who visited after the refurbishment which was 74000 and 92000 respectably. In year before refurbishment 15 percent visitors rated the museum as very satisfied as compare to year after refurbishment this level inclined and 35% people rated it same. Dissatisfied rating was 40% before renovation, after this rate took place as satisfaction in latter year same as 40%, however satisfaction was recorded at 30% and in former year and dissatisfaction was half of it after renovation 15%.

Before refurbishment, the rating of very dissatisfaction was at 10% after its enhancement it reduced and remainded half of it at 5%. About 5 percent visitor did not response about their experience which also was noticed same after the renovation of the museum 5%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all parts of the task, including the visitor numbers and the satisfaction survey data. You successfully identified the main trends, such as the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the reporting of data is occasionally confusing. For example, the sentence 'Dissatisfied rating was 40% before renovation, after this rate took place as satisfaction in latter year same as 40%' is difficult to follow due to poor phrasing. To reach a higher band, ensure that comparisons between the two years are stated with greater clarity and precision, avoiding repetitive or ambiguous sentence structures when describing the percentages.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on specific data points. You use some cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'In initial year', and 'however'. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the final paragraph where the mention of '5 percent visitor' is slightly disjointed. Improving the use of transition words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'refurbishment', 'renovation', and 'satisfaction'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'did not response' (should be 'did not respond') and 'very dissatisfaction' (should be 'very dissatisfied'). Additionally, some phrasing is awkward, such as 'this level inclined'. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensure that word forms are used correctly in context. Expanding your range of synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' would also be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('total number of visitors were'), tense consistency, and awkward sentence construction ('after this rate took place as satisfaction'). Punctuation is generally functional, but some sentences are run-on or lack necessary articles. To achieve a higher score, focus on reducing these frequent errors and ensuring that your complex sentences are constructed accurately to improve the overall readability of your report.

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