Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

THE TABLE AND PIE TABLE SHOW THE NUMBER OF VISITORS TO ASHDOWN MUSEUM BEFORE AND AFTER THE REPAIR OF MUSEUM ALONG THE SATISFACTION DURING THESE PERIOD.

THE TABLE SHOWS THE POSITIVE EFFECT OF REFURBISHMENT ON NUMBER OF VISITOR OVERALL.THE PIE CHART SHOWS THAT VISITORS ARE SATISFIED OR VERY SATISFIED AFTER RENOVATION.

ACCORDING TO TABLE THE MUSEUM RECEIVED 74000 VISITOR BEFORE REFURBISHMENT AND 92000 AFTER RENOVATION SO 18000 MORE PEOPLE VISIT AFTER RENOVATION.

BEFORE THE RENOVATION ONLY 74000 VISITORS CAME OUT OF WHICH A LARGE PROPORTION 40% VISITORS WERE DISSATISFIED.5% NOT RESPOND.10% PEOPLE WERE VERY DISSATISFIED.AND ONLY 15% PEOPLE WERE VERY SATISFIED WHICH IS VERY SMALL PROPORTION.ONLY 30% WERE SATISFIED BY VISITING MUSEUM. THIS SHOW THAT BEFORE RENOVATION A LARGE PROPORTION WAS DISSATISFIED BY VISIT OF MUSEUM.

IN SEND TABLE AND PIE CHART AFTER RENOVATION VISITORS GIVE VERY POSITIVE FEEDBACK. AFTER RENOVATION A LARGE PROPORTION 35% VISITORS VISITED MUSEUM WHICH WAS A SIGNIFICANT CHANGE. A GREAT CHANGE OCCUR IN NUMBER OF VISITORS AFTER RENOVATION. 40% VISITORS WERE SATISFIED BY VISIT.A SMALL PROPORTION ABOUT 15% PEOPLE WERE DISSATISFIED BY VISIT WHILE 5% WERE VERY DISSATISFIED. AND ONLY 5 NOT RESPOND.

AFTER ALL RENOVATION NOT ONLY INCREASE NUMBERS OF VISITORS BUT ALSO IMPROVED THEIR EXPERIENCE AND SATISFACTION LEVEL.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully identified the main trends and provided data to support your points. You clearly contrasted the visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels before and after the refurbishment. However, the response lacks a clear overview paragraph, which is essential for a Band 7 or higher. Additionally, some data interpretation is slightly repetitive, and the structure could be more professional. To improve, ensure you group information logically and provide a concise summary of the most significant trends in the introduction or as a separate overview paragraph.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'Before the renovation', 'After the renovation'). There is a lack of sophisticated linking words to connect ideas between sentences and paragraphs. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the flow could be improved by using a wider variety of transition signals to show contrast and sequence more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic. You rely heavily on simple terms like 'big' or 'change' and repeat words like 'visitors' and 'renovation' frequently. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'significant increase', 'dramatic shift', or 'proportionate rise'. There are also some minor errors in word choice, such as 'pie table' (it is a pie chart) and 'send table' (second table).

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include missing articles (e.g., 'according to table'), incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'visitors give' instead of 'gave'), and punctuation errors, such as missing spaces after periods. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage when describing past data will significantly improve your accuracy.

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