Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The table chart illustrates the total number of visitors to Ashdown Museum in after and before year then results of surveys of visitor satisfaction in before and after year refurbishment.

Overall, the year before refurbishment lowest in 74,000 compare to year after refurbishment is 92,000. However, the year before are highest responses of visitor is dissatisfied and the highest proportion of survey responses was 'very satisfied' after the refurbishment.

In during after year results of surveys of visitor is very satisfied of 35%, visitor best responses on satisfied is 40% rather than dissatisfied is 15% and same of very dissatisfied and no response of visitor is 5% compare to before year result of surveys of visitor is highly response on dissatisfied of 40% and small different of satisfied is 30%, minor change on no response 5%, very dissatisfied is 10% and very satisfied is 15%. However, the total number of after year refurbishment 92,000 and before year refurbishment 74,000.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the task by summarizing the visitor numbers and satisfaction survey results. However, the reporting of data is often confusing and lacks clarity. For instance, the phrase 'the year before refurbishment lowest in 74,000' is grammatically awkward and makes the comparison difficult to follow. While the main features are identified, the lack of precise language and the repetitive structure hinder the overall impact. The comparison between the two years is attempted, but the data presentation is disorganized, making it difficult for the reader to grasp the trends effectively. To improve, focus on clearly stating the figures and using comparative language more accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into three short paragraphs, but the logical flow is weak. The transition between the overview and the specific data points is abrupt. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'However' and 'In during after year', but they are often misused or placed awkwardly, which makes the progression of ideas feel mechanical and sometimes confusing. Referencing is also problematic; for example, 'same of very dissatisfied and no response' is unclear. To reach a higher band, you should use a wider range of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that connects logically to the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'year', 'results', and 'visitor' without much variation. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'highly response on dissatisfied' instead of 'a high percentage of dissatisfied responses'. The phrasing 'small different of satisfied' is also incorrect. To improve your score, try to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', 'significant', or 'majority', and ensure that your word choices are grammatically appropriate for the context of a report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with article usage ('the year before refurbishment'), prepositional errors ('In during after year'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack necessary verbs, such as 'the year before are highest responses'. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty, leading to a lack of clarity. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and using correct prepositions when describing data trends.

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