Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The provided charts represent the data on the visitor satisfaction before and after the renovation of the Ashdown museum

Overall, the visual data depicts the change in number of visitors and result of survey on visitor expression.

Before the renovation year 74,000 travellers visited museum. Whereas, after development number is increased with 92,000 visitors. However, the results are very significant after alternations in museum. Before renovation very satisfied rating was 15% but after a year it become 35%. similarly, satisfied visitors before changes were 30% and increased by 10%.

Oppositely, ratio of dissatisfied visitors faced a drop after construction happened. It was dropped from 40% to only 15%. In a same way rating of very dissatisfied traveller ratio was fallen from 10% to 5%. Lastly, no response remained same with 5%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response provides a clear overview and identifies the main trends, such as the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the response is under the 150-word minimum requirement, which significantly impacts the score. Because the length requirement is not met, the development of ideas is limited, and some data points are presented in a list-like fashion rather than being fully integrated into a cohesive analytical report. To improve, you should expand on the comparisons between the two periods and ensure you meet the minimum word count to allow for a more thorough exploration of the data.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into a brief introduction and two body paragraphs. While there is a logical flow, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'Before the renovation', 'after development', 'Oppositely'). The transition between the visitor numbers and the satisfaction survey results is abrupt. To achieve a higher band, try to use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the data analysis more smoothly.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety expected at higher levels. You rely on basic descriptors such as 'very significant' and 'increased'. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'visitor expression' instead of 'visitor satisfaction' and 'alternations' instead of 'alterations' or 'renovations'. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'a substantial rise', 'a marked decline', or 'fluctuated', and ensure you are using the correct terminology for the data provided.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Examples include 'number is increased with 92,000' (should be 'the number increased to 92,000'), 'in a same way' (should be 'in the same way'), and 'ratio of dissatisfied visitors faced a drop' (should be 'the proportion of dissatisfied visitors dropped'). There are also issues with article usage and verb tense consistency. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions will help improve your accuracy.

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