Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given table chart how many vistor to visit ashdown musewm in year before and theyear after refurfishedalong with the result of surveys measuring vistor satisifaction during these two period overall the ruberbishment had a positive impact on both the number of visitor and thier satification levels the meseum attracted more vistors after the renovation while the proportion of satisified visitors increased significantly and the percentages of dissatisified visitors declined acoording to the table the total numbers refubishment 92000 afterwords , visitors rose from 74000 before the representing an increase of 18000 visitor after the rubrishment visitor satisification improved considerable the proportion of very visitors more then doubled to 35% and the figure.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop the response. While you have identified the main trends—an increase in visitor numbers and improved satisfaction—the analysis is incomplete and cuts off abruptly at the end. To improve, ensure you cover all data points provided in the charts and provide a complete summary that includes a clear overview and supporting details for all categories. Because the response is under-length and incomplete, it cannot fully address all parts of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The text lacks clear paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow the logical progression of ideas. There is an absence of cohesive devices to link sentences and clauses, resulting in a fragmented flow. For example, the transition between the overview and the specific data is abrupt. To improve, use clear paragraph breaks to separate the introduction/overview from the body paragraphs, and employ linking words such as 'furthermore', 'in contrast', or 'consequently' to connect your ideas more effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is quite limited and contains numerous spelling errors, such as 'vistor', 'musewm', 'refurfished', and 'ruberbishment'. These errors are frequent and occasionally impede the reader's understanding. While you attempted to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'proportion' and 'satisfaction', the range is insufficient to demonstrate a higher level of control. Focus on proofreading your work to correct basic spelling mistakes and try to incorporate a wider variety of synonyms to describe trends, such as 'surged', 'plummeted', or 'remained stable'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles ('the given table'), incorrect verb forms ('vistor to visit'), and run-on sentences that lack proper punctuation. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the existing sentences are often structurally incomplete or confusing. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb. Additionally, practice using punctuation correctly to separate distinct ideas, as the current lack of full stops makes the text difficult to parse.
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