Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The given table graph represents the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum before and after refurbished. The given pair of pie chart provides information about the surveys asking the tourists how satisfied they were with their visit during those periods. The data has been calibrated into numbers and percentage.

overall , it is clearly seen that the highest number of visitors visit after the renovation of museum whereas people did not respond were similar in both years

At a fleeting glance, it was evident that people visited before refurbished of museum were 74,000 and after the redecoration of museum there were 92,000 visitors visit. The result of survey before refurbishment and after redecoration were same that people did not respond . Tourists those were very satisfied was 15% before and 35% after renovation of museum .

Moving ahead, 30% of visitors were satisfied before renovation and 40% people were satisfied after redecoration. 40% and 15% of tourists were dissatisfied before and after refurbishment of museum respectively. there was difference of 5% people who where very dissatisfied .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features of the table and pie charts. You successfully compared the visitor numbers (74,000 to 92,000) and highlighted key trends in satisfaction levels. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a more sophisticated synthesis of the data. For instance, while you mention the percentages, the comparison of the 'dissatisfied' categories could be more clearly integrated. To reach a higher band, ensure that the overview provides a more comprehensive summary of the most significant trends rather than just stating that numbers increased.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moving ahead' and 'At a fleeting glance' to transition between ideas. However, some of these transitions feel slightly unnatural or repetitive. The referencing is generally clear, but the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and avoiding short, choppy sentences. The overall progression is logical, but the connection between the table data and the survey data could be smoother to enhance the cohesion of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to describe the data, such as 'renovation', 'redecoration', and 'satisfied'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'before refurbished of museum' and 'people did not respond were similar'. These errors occasionally make the text feel repetitive or imprecise. To improve, focus on using more precise academic collocations and ensure that your word forms (e.g., 'refurbishment' vs 'refurbished') are used correctly in context. Expanding your range of descriptive verbs and adjectives would also help elevate the quality of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Examples include 'people visited before refurbished of museum' (should be 'people who visited before the refurbishment') and 'there was difference of 5% people who where very dissatisfied' (should be 'there was a 5% difference in the number of people who were...'). These errors are noticeable and sometimes impede the flow of reading, though the meaning remains clear. To achieve a higher score, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and the accurate application of relative clauses.

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