Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The table diagram is many information and suggestion regarding Meseum during year. this is the Total number of visitors to Ashdown Meseum in all type of result in mentiond it. first of fall very satisfied in lwss tand difference. then satisfide is also decline. because all of the change is not big. third one is dissatisfied incresed into more than differences. forth one is very dissatisfied only 10 percentage ratio propotions. The last one is no response, it was nothing any change, it is perfact similar.
it is very easy table, because only depend in propotion ratio. all of table is percentage regarding and time increse or decrease. total during the number of visitors are before74000 and recent 92000. this is most of the change in to figures.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully address the task. While you identified the total visitor numbers and some survey trends, the analysis is fragmented and lacks a clear overview or logical structure. You mention 'very satisfied' and 'dissatisfied' categories, but the description is confusing and does not clearly compare the data between the two years. To improve, you must ensure you cover all parts of the prompt, provide a clear summary of the main trends, and meet the length requirement to allow for sufficient development of your ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay lacks a logical structure. There is no clear paragraphing, and the progression of ideas is difficult to follow. You use some basic cohesive devices like 'first of fall' and 'third one', but these are used incorrectly or mechanically. The sentences are often disconnected, making it hard for the reader to understand the relationship between the data points. To improve, focus on grouping related information into distinct paragraphs—such as an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs—and use a wider range of linking words to connect your sentences more naturally.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'change', 'number', and 'table'. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'Meseum' instead of 'Museum', 'lwss tand' instead of 'less than', and 'propotions'. These errors, combined with the limited range, make it difficult to convey precise information about the data. To improve, try to learn and use more academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'proportion', and 'significant increase'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The grammar is weak, with frequent errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, sentence fragments, and incorrect word order (e.g., 'The table diagram is many information'). You rely almost exclusively on simple sentence structures, and even these contain errors in punctuation and tense. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practicing the correct use of articles and prepositions.
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