Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The provided chart and table illustrate the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was renovated, and the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with the visit, during the same periods.

During the year before refurbishment the total number of visitors are 74,000 and, during the year after refurbishment, the total numbers of visitors are 92,000 to Ashdown Museum. Meanwhile, the total number of visitors before and after refurbishment of Ashdown Museum are 1,66000. According to the results of survey of visitor satisfaction year before refurbishment, 15% of visitors are very satisfied, 30% are satisfied, 40% are dissatisfied, 10% are very satisfied, and 5% of them with no response.

While the year after refurbishment, very satisfied percentage rises to 35%, satisfied percentage also increases to 40%, dissatisfied percentage reduces to 15%, very dissatisfied percentage reduces to 5%, and the visitor with no response is not changed and remain at 5%.

In conclusion, the visitor's satisfaction level is improved when we compare percentage's before and after refurbishment that are given in pie chart.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers the main features of the data, including the visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the report is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear overview or summary of the most significant trends. While the data is presented, the comparison between the two periods could be more analytical rather than just listing figures. For instance, noting the significant shift from 'dissatisfied' to 'satisfied' categories would strengthen the response. The inclusion of a total figure (166,000) is unnecessary and does not add value to the analysis of the trends.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat repetitive and basic (e.g., 'Meanwhile', 'While', 'In conclusion'). The transition between the visitor numbers and the survey results is abrupt. To improve, you should use a wider range of linking words to connect ideas more fluidly, such as 'In contrast', 'Furthermore', or 'Consequently'. The paragraphing is logical, but the internal flow within the paragraphs could be smoother to better guide the reader through the comparison of the two years.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely heavily on basic terms like 'numbers', 'increases', and 'reduces'. There is also a minor error in the presentation of the total figure (1,66000). To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to data description, such as 'witnessed a rise', 'experienced a decline', or 'the proportion of'. The repetition of 'percentage' and 'visitors' throughout the text makes the writing feel somewhat monotonous. Expanding your range of synonyms will help improve the overall quality of your report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. For example, 'the total number of visitors are' should be 'was' (subject-verb agreement), and 'the visitor with no response is not changed' should be 'remained unchanged'. Additionally, there are issues with punctuation and article usage. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage (past tense for the reported data) will significantly improve your accuracy.

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