Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The image illustrates the total number of visitors visit befor and after refurbishment of Ashdown Museum, and the pie chart demonstrates how visitors responded to the surveys conducted by the museum.

Overall, number of visitors increased after the refurbishment and the satisfaction level increased massively while dissatisfied portion decreased after the modernization.

Regarding the before refurbushment, the total number of visitors were recorded 74,000. The surveys results represent majority of the people who visit were dissatisfied, which was 40%. Whereas, satisfied level was recorded as 30%. Given very satisfied portion was 15% and small percentage recored among the very dissatisfied and no response.

After refurbishment, number of visitors increased rapidly and it recorded 92,000 compare with before refurbhishment it was great achievement. Moreover, most remarkeble thing was very stisfied percentage doubled up when it compared with before refurbishment from 15% to 35%. Looking at the satisfied level, it was increased from 30% to 40%, and it was managed to decrease the dissatified to 15% it was before recorded as 40%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully identified the main features of the data, including the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. You provided a clear overview and supported your points with specific data from the charts. However, the response could be improved by ensuring all data points are accurately described; for instance, the 'no response' category was mentioned but not quantified. Additionally, while you made comparisons, some of the phrasing is slightly informal (e.g., 'doubled up'). To reach a higher band, ensure that all comparisons are precise and that you avoid subjective commentary like 'it was great achievement', as the task requires an objective summary of the provided information.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Regarding', 'Whereas', and 'Moreover' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by mechanical phrasing and some awkward transitions between sentences. For example, the final sentence of the second body paragraph is a run-on that lacks clear punctuation, making the progression of ideas feel slightly disjointed. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence clearly connects to the previous one without relying on repetitive structures.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'refurbishment', 'modernization', and 'survey'. However, there are several spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'befor', 'refurbushment', 'remarkeble', and 'stisfied'. These errors are noticeable and detract from the overall quality of the writing. Furthermore, some word choices are imprecise or repetitive. To achieve a higher score, you should focus on accurate spelling and expanding your vocabulary to include more sophisticated collocations related to data description, such as 'a significant rise' or 'a marked improvement', rather than relying on simpler descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Issues include missing articles (e.g., 'number of visitors increased'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'total number of visitors were recorded'), and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'it was managed to decrease the dissatified'). While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band. To improve, pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement, the correct use of articles, and ensuring that your complex sentences are punctuated correctly to avoid run-on structures.

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