Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The table illustrates how many people visit Ashdown museum before and after a year it was refurbished, while pie charts give information about the satisfaction rate who visit the museum during the same periods.

Overall, the highest figure was observed for the year after refurbishment. In term of visitors satisfaction,most people were satisfied their visit after restoration.

At a fleeting glance, According to the table chart, 74,000 people went to the Ashdown museum during a year before renovation. The number of visitors accounted for 92,000 before the museum was restored.

Moving ahead, turning to the pie charts, according to the results of the survey for a year before refurbishment, 40% of visitors were dissatisfied, 15% were very satisfied,30%were satisfied,10% were very dissatisfied, and 5% of individuals did not respond. In contrast, the figures for after refurbishment were the remarkable,40% of people were satisfied,35% were very satisfied, 5% were satisfied, 15% were dissatisfied and 5% of visitors did not respond.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the table and charts, but there are significant inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, you state 74,000 visitors before renovation and 92,000 after, but the data provided in the prompt (which you should have interpreted from the table) shows 74,000 and 92,000 respectively; however, your description of the pie charts contains errors, such as misinterpreting the 'after' data categories. While you identify the main trends, the lack of precision in reporting the figures and the confusion in the survey data analysis prevent a higher score. Ensure you double-check the figures against the source material to avoid factual errors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'In contrast', and 'Moving ahead' to link ideas. However, some transitions feel mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'At a fleeting glance'. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the internal cohesion within the paragraph discussing the pie charts is weakened by the repetitive listing of percentages without sufficient synthesis. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would enhance the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to convey the basic information. You use some relevant terms like 'refurbished', 'renovation', and 'satisfaction rate'. However, there is a lack of variety, and some word choices are slightly awkward or imprecise, such as 'the figures for after refurbishment were the remarkable'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends and comparisons, such as 'experienced a significant increase' or 'the proportion of visitors who felt...', rather than relying on simple sentence structures.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'satisfaction rate who visit' (should be 'satisfaction rate of those who visited') and 'satisfied their visit' (should be 'satisfied with their visit'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas in the final paragraph. These errors do not impede communication, but they occur frequently enough to limit the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct preposition usage will help improve your accuracy.

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