Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The provided chart and table illustrate the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was renovated, and the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with the visit, during the same periods.

During the year before refurbishment the total visitors are 74,000 and, during the year after refurbishment, the total visitors are 92,000 to Ashdown Museum. Meanwhile, the total visitors before and after refurbishment of Ashdown Museum are 1,66000. According to the results of survey of visitor satisfaction year before refurbishment, 15% of visitors are very satisfied, 30% are satisfied, 40% are dissatisfied, 10% are very satisfied, and 5% of them with no response.

While the year after refurbishment, very satisfied percentage rises to 35%, satisfied percentage also increases to 40%, dissatisfied percentage reduces to 15%, very dissatisfied percentage reduces to 5%, and the visitor with no response is not changed and remain at 5%.

In conclusion, the visitor's satisfaction level is improved when we compare percentage's before and after refurbishment that are given in pie chart

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers the main features of the data, including the visitor numbers and the satisfaction survey results. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical. You have correctly identified the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. To reach a higher band, ensure that you do not simply list data points; instead, group them to highlight significant trends or contrasts. For example, you could have more effectively contrasted the 'dissatisfied' categories before and after the refurbishment. Additionally, there is a minor error in the data reporting where you listed 'very satisfied' twice in the first paragraph instead of 'very dissatisfied'.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. You use basic cohesive devices like 'Meanwhile', 'While', and 'In conclusion' to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes repetitive, and the use of cohesive devices is a bit mechanical. To improve, try to vary your linking words and ensure that the transition between the visitor numbers and the survey results is smoother. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the internal structure of the paragraphs could benefit from more sophisticated signposting to guide the reader through the comparison of the two time periods.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly, using terms like 'refurbishment', 'renovated', and 'satisfaction level'. However, the range is somewhat limited and repetitive. There are also some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'the visitor with no response is not changed', which sounds slightly unnatural. To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary and avoid repeating the same phrases. Using synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' would also demonstrate a more flexible control of language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'the total visitors are 74,000' (should be 'were'), 'the visitor with no response is not changed' (should be 'remained unchanged'), and 'percentage's' (incorrect use of apostrophe). These errors do not impede communication, but they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of tense when describing past data. Ensure that you proofread for small punctuation and pluralization errors.

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