Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The given two pie chart compare the surveys total number of visitor in Ashdown Museum before and after refurbishment and surveys of satisfaction. It is clear that number of visitors are increase after the refurbishment.
During the refurbishment total 74000 visitors visit to Ashdown museum. And eventually it increase mare then 90000 after the refurbishment. This pie chart shows different category of satisfaction. Number of very satisfied are increase after the refurbishment. In addition of satisfied level are also increase. Total number of very satisficed and satisfied are increase 15 to 35 and 30 to 40.
Before refurbishment dissatisfied visitors are more then 40 and after year of refurbishment are decrease to 15. and very dissatisfied visitors numbers are also half after refurbishment. and the visitors who not gave response are remain as same.
It is clear that satisfaction level are increase and number of visitors are dissatisfied are decrees after the refurbishment's surveys if visitors satisfaction.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses the task by identifying the main trends in visitor numbers and satisfaction levels. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you correctly identify that visitor numbers increased and satisfaction improved, the data presentation is inconsistent. For instance, you mention '74000' and '90000' for visitor numbers, but the prompt provided a table and charts where these figures should be clearly linked to the specific years. The comparison of satisfaction percentages is present but lacks precision in describing the shifts between categories. To improve, ensure you clearly label the two periods (e.g., 'before' and 'after') and provide a more structured overview of the data points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'In addition of' are used incorrectly, and the transition between sentences is sometimes abrupt. The logical progression is hindered by repetitive sentence structures and a lack of varied linking words. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider range of cohesive devices (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in contrast') to connect your ideas more fluidly and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'increase' and 'decrease'. There are several errors in word choice and form, such as 'very satisficed' instead of 'satisfied' and 'decrees' instead of 'decreased'. The range of vocabulary is just adequate to convey the basic meaning of the task, but it lacks the precision and variety expected for higher bands. To improve, try to incorporate more descriptive verbs and adjectives related to data trends, such as 'rose significantly', 'declined', 'remained stable', or 'a substantial proportion'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'number of visitors are increase') and tense usage (e.g., 'visitors visit to'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some sentences starting with lowercase letters or lacking proper structure. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that your subjects and verbs agree and that you are using the correct tense for reporting past data.
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