Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The given pie charts illustrate the percentage of people who visited Ashdown Museum before and one year after renovation. The graphs give information about the surveys which were done about the visitors 'satisfaction.
As it can be seen 15 % of people were very satisfied who visited the museum before to be refurnished, and 40 % of people have been dissatisfied . Whereas , the percentage of very satisfaction jumped to more than double after renovation from 15 % to 35% and visitors have been dissatisfaction declined to more than half from 40 % to 15 % .
People who did not respond to the survey stayed to same percentage 5% for bothe before and after renovation.
As the chart showes, satisfied people have been 30 % before refurnushed.However, satisfied visiors incresed to 40% after renovation. Meanwhile, survay showes very dissatisfied people dropped to 5% from 10% after refurnished.
Overal the pie chart dipicts the increased satisfaction one year after renovation.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response covers the main features of the data, including the overall trend of increased satisfaction. However, the report is somewhat disjointed because the data is presented in a fragmented way rather than as a cohesive summary. While you identified the key changes (e.g., very satisfied increasing from 15% to 35%), the description of the 'before' and 'after' data is repetitive. To improve, focus on grouping the data more logically—for instance, by comparing the 'satisfied' categories together rather than jumping between different satisfaction levels in separate paragraphs. Ensure all data points are accurately transcribed, as there are minor inconsistencies in the figures cited.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate. For example, the transition 'As it can be seen' is slightly unnatural, and the use of 'Whereas' at the start of a sentence is grammatically awkward in this context. The progression of ideas is sometimes interrupted by short, choppy sentences, such as the paragraph regarding the 5% non-respondents. Using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that sentences flow more naturally into one another would improve the overall coherence of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey the main trends. You use some relevant terms like 'renovation', 'percentage', and 'satisfied'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'before to be refurnished' and 'very satisfaction'. Additionally, there are spelling errors like 'bothe', 'showes', and 'refurnushed'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and ensure that you are using the correct word forms (e.g., using 'satisfaction' as a noun rather than an adjective).
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of the text. Issues include incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'have been dissatisfied' instead of 'were dissatisfied'), missing articles, and awkward prepositional usage. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors limits the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage when describing past data will help improve your accuracy.
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