Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

THE TABELE CHART SHOWING THA 2 TIME PIRIODS GRAPH BEFORE AND AFTER THIS GRIFPH WRITING DISCUSEE BOTH OF VIUE .

AT A GLANCE THE REFURBISHMENT NUMBER ARE CHANGED IN THIS YEAR TO COMPEIR WITH PRIVIUS YEAR THIS YEAR THE NUMBER ARE ENCISED TO APROXIMETLIY 18000.

IN LAST YEAR THE DISSATISIFIED PARSON IS 40% BUN IN THIS YEAR IT'S DICRISED AT 15%.THE SATISFIED PIOPLE ARE 30% IN PRIVUSE YEAR BUT IN THIS YEAR THE PORSANTEGS ARE INCRISE IN TO 40%.THE VEREY DISSATISFIED HUMEN IN PAST YEAR IS 10% BUT IN TODAY IS LESS IN HALFE AT 5%.BUT ONE THINGS ARE SIMIULER IN BOTH YEARS THAT IS NO NORESPONSE.

TO CENCLUDE: THE RINOVETION AND FETATURES DISIONES ARE VERIY INPORTANT IN ANEY PLASES TO ACTRACT MORE AND MORE PIOPLE TO ENHANSING THE LEVEL OF THER JOY AND MORE THEY KNOW THIR HISTOREY WITH NEW TACHNOLOGY.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have attempted to report on the visitor numbers and satisfaction levels, the information is presented in a fragmented manner. The overview is weak and lacks a clear summary of the main trends. Furthermore, the data interpretation is inconsistent; for instance, you mention '18000' without clarifying if this is the total or the increase, and the percentages provided for satisfaction levels are not fully integrated into a coherent comparison. To improve, ensure you cover all parts of the prompt, provide a clear overview, and support your points with accurate data from the charts.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. The paragraphs are poorly defined, and the transition between the visitor numbers and the satisfaction survey is abrupt. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas; sentences are often disjointed, making the progression of information difficult to follow. The conclusion is more of a personal opinion on renovations rather than a summary of the data provided. To improve, use linking words (e.g., 'however', 'in contrast', 'furthermore') to connect your sentences and ensure each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and contains numerous spelling errors that impede readability, such as 'TABELE', 'PIRIODS', 'GRIFPH', 'ENCISED', 'PRIVIUS', and 'RINOVETION'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends or data accurately. You rely on basic, repetitive words and struggle to use appropriate terminology for describing charts (e.g., 'the number are encised' instead of 'the number increased'). You need to focus on learning standard academic vocabulary for describing data and pay close attention to spelling accuracy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that make the text difficult to understand. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the number are encised'), tense usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper punctuation, which disrupts the flow of the writing. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures, and the basic sentences used are often inaccurate. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and consistent verb tenses before attempting more complex structures.

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