Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The table and pie chart demonstrates the difference of numbers of visitors to Ashdown during the refurbished year and after the refurbished of Ashdown Museum. Overall, the total numbers of visitors has been increase after the refurbishment of Ashdown Museum and visitors satisfaction level has been also significantly increased. Everyone could see that before refurbished only 74,000 visitors came to the Ashdown Museum but after the refurbished of Ashdown Museum, total number of visitors had been increased to the 92,000. Similarly, as we see that before refurbishment of Ashdown Museum, only 15 visitors were very satisfied with their visit of Ashdown Museum but after the refurbish 35 visitors were very satisfied with their visit in Ashdown Museum.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop the response. While you have identified the main trends—the increase in visitor numbers and satisfaction levels—the analysis is underdeveloped. You have not included all the data points from the charts, such as the 'satisfied' or 'dissatisfied' categories, which are essential for a complete summary. To improve, ensure you cover all categories provided in the visual data and provide a more comprehensive overview that compares the two periods in greater detail. The current length prevents a higher band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is written as a single paragraph, which lacks the necessary structure for an academic report. While there is a basic attempt at an introduction and a summary of trends, the lack of paragraphing makes the flow feel disjointed. You use some cohesive devices like 'Overall' and 'Similarly', but these are used in a repetitive and mechanical way. To improve, you should organize your response into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview of the main trends, and separate paragraphs for detailed comparisons. This will help guide the reader through your analysis more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. You frequently use the phrase 'refurbished of Ashdown Museum' and 'visit of Ashdown Museum', which indicates a lack of lexical variety. There are also errors in word form, such as 'the refurbished year' instead of 'the year after refurbishment'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'experienced a rise', 'witnessed a growth', or 'remained stable'. Avoid repeating the same nouns and verbs throughout the text; instead, use synonyms and more precise collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are several grammatical errors that hinder the clarity of your writing. For example, 'The table and pie chart demonstrates' should be 'demonstrate' (subject-verb agreement). You also have issues with article usage and word forms, such as 'after the refurbished of' instead of 'after the refurbishment of'. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and article usage. Additionally, try to incorporate more complex sentence structures, such as using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions, to demonstrate a wider grammatical range.

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