Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The table illustrates the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts showing the comparision of the result of surveys to judge the satisfaction level over the same two periods.

Overall, total number of visitors in year after are surpassed than the year before refurbishment.Meanwhile, the comparision between two chars indicates that the percentage of satisfaction is increased slightly while the numbers of dissatisfied visitors is decreased dramatically.

Furthermore, in the table, the number of visitors rise from the year before which constituted 74,000 to 92,000 in year after reburishment. On the other hand, contrast between the bar charts depicting that the number of satified visitors is climbing from 30% to 35% , dissatisfied

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop the response. While you have identified the main features—the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels—the analysis is incomplete. The response ends abruptly mid-sentence, meaning the data is not fully reported or compared. To improve, ensure you complete the description of all data points provided in the charts and provide a more comprehensive summary of the trends. The failure to complete the task prevents a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into an introduction, an overview, and a body paragraph. However, the progression is interrupted by the incomplete nature of the final sentence. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'Meanwhile', and 'Furthermore' are used, but they are sometimes used mechanically. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'contrast between the bar charts depicting that', which lacks a clear subject or logical flow. Improving the logical connection between sentences and ensuring the text is finished will greatly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'comparision' (comparison), 'reburishment' (refurbishment), and 'chars' (charts). The phrasing 'surpassed than' is grammatically incorrect and unnatural. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise vocabulary for describing data trends, such as 'rose significantly' or 'experienced a decline', and ensure that your spelling is accurate. The range of vocabulary is currently limited.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'total number of visitors in year after are surpassed than the year before', which lacks proper article usage and correct comparative structure. The sentence structure is often simplistic or fragmented. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, they are often marred by errors in subject-verb agreement and preposition usage. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms.

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