Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Here the give table illustrates visitors number who visited Ashdown Museum during the year before and after it was refurbished. Whereas pie charts show outcome of a surveys based on visitors satisfaction level who visited the museum.

Overall, for the pie chart, dissatisfaction was the most major outcome before refurbishment followed by satisfaction. While after refurbishment survey showed increment in satisfaction along with very satisfied visitors.

To commence with , for the table, around 74,000 individuals visited to the museum before it got refurbished which increased to 92,000 after refurbishment.

Outcome of the before refurbishment shows that ,ratio of dissatisfied visitors were the 40% while visitors customer were 30% which is double of very satisfied. Very dissatisfied individuals noted for 10% which is also double of unanswered. Lastly after the refurbishment, In addition visitors ratio increased to 40% and dissatisfied visitors decline to only 15% . Further more no response visitor remains segment while very satisfied customer faced most notable increment ( 35% ). Lastly very dissatisfied visitors fall to 5%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers all parts of the task by reporting the visitor numbers and the satisfaction survey results. You have successfully identified the main trends, such as the increase in visitor numbers and the shift from dissatisfaction to satisfaction post-refurbishment. However, the analysis is slightly hampered by some confusing phrasing, particularly when describing the survey data. For instance, the statement 'visitors customer were 30% which is double of very satisfied' is unclear and mathematically confusing. To reach a higher band, ensure that comparisons are stated with greater precision and that the data points are clearly linked to the specific categories provided in the charts.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on the table and the charts respectively. You have used some cohesive devices such as 'To commence with', 'Lastly', and 'In addition'. However, the flow is occasionally disrupted by awkward transitions and some mechanical use of linking words. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the final paragraph where the connection between the visitor categories and the percentages is difficult to follow. Improving the variety and naturalness of your cohesive devices will help the progression of your ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the main points, using terms like 'refurbished', 'satisfaction level', and 'notable increment'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and awkward collocations, such as 'visitors number' instead of 'number of visitors', and 'visitors customer' which is redundant. There are also some minor errors in word formation, such as 'dissatisfaction was the most major outcome'. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensuring that your word choices are natural and appropriate for a formal report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt to use complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, including issues with articles ('the give table', 'the ratio of dissatisfied'), subject-verb agreement ('visitors ratio increased', 'dissatisfied visitors decline'), and punctuation (unnecessary spaces before commas). These errors are noticeable and occasionally make the text harder to read, although they do not completely impede communication. To achieve a higher score, focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy, particularly with pluralisation and verb tenses.

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