Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The chart shown that the number of satification before and after the year when Ashdown Museum was refurbished There are 74,000 average visitor in museum the year before it was not ranovated and there are about 92,000 visitor in museum the year after it was remaintained. before refuishment there are 15% people are very satisfied and after the year it was remaintained then increased the number of very satisfied upto 35%. second the number of visitor are only satisfied during the year before it was redecorated are almost 30% but during the year after when it was redecorated are increased about 35%. In the way, the number of visitor that are dissatisfied during the year before it was reconstructed are in huge number about 40% and the value of dissatisfied are reduced during the year after when it was reconstructed are about 15%. At the same time the percantage of people who are very dissatisfied during the year before refurbishment are 10% and during the year after refurbishment are remain half 5%

At the last the average of norespose are remain same at both cases

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main features of the data, including visitor numbers and satisfaction levels. However, the presentation is somewhat mechanical, listing figures without sufficient synthesis or clear grouping. While the key trends (the increase in visitor numbers and the shift from dissatisfaction to satisfaction) are identified, the lack of a clear overview paragraph makes it difficult to grasp the 'big picture' immediately. The data is generally accurate, but the report would benefit from more sophisticated comparisons between the two periods rather than simply stating the figures for each year sequentially.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response lacks effective paragraphing, appearing as a single block of text. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often repetitive or misused (e.g., 'second', 'In the way', 'At the last'). The logical flow is hindered by the lack of clear transitions between the visitor numbers and the satisfaction survey data. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the overall structure feels disjointed. To improve, you should group related information into distinct paragraphs and use a wider variety of linking words to guide the reader through your analysis.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. You frequently use the same verbs and nouns, such as 'refurbished', 'redecorated', and 'reconstructed', which are often used incorrectly in context. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'satification', 'ranovated', 'remaintained', and 'percantage'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of precision and the frequent spelling mistakes limit the score. Using a broader range of synonyms and ensuring correct word choice would significantly enhance the quality of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the number of visitor are'), incorrect tense usage, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'the value of dissatisfied are reduced'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences and missing commas. While the meaning is usually understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents the text from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence boundary control and subject-verb agreement will help improve your accuracy.

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