Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The table chart illustrates the number of visitors who visit the museum before and after reconstruction, and pie chat shows result of survey what is the experience of visitors before and after developing.

Overall, it is evident that, before reconstruction majority of the people who visited, and their experience was unsatisfied. However after redevelopment of museum people were more interested and satisfied too.

To begin with, there was a big difference in visitors before and after refurbishment, 74,000 before rebuilt, and 92,000 after reconstructed. On the other hand, result of survey before redevelop the museum, there were no big difference in number of people who are dissatisfied and satisfied, 40% and 30% respectively. Moreover, 10% of the audience was very unsatisfied, and people who are very satisfied were only 5% higher than very dissatisfied. and 5% of the people had no response.

After the year of redevelopment of museum visitors how are 30% satisfied before development , but after an year it has grown to 40% respectively. The survey accounted the proportion of very satisfied was boomed after development 35%. Furthermore, 15% of people, which accounted as they were dissatisfied, and the percentage of people who are extremely dissatisfied and no response were almsot same.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main features of the data, including the visitor numbers and the shifts in satisfaction levels. However, the analysis is somewhat inconsistent. While you identify the increase in visitors and the general improvement in satisfaction, the reporting of specific data points is occasionally confusing or inaccurate (e.g., stating 'no big difference' when comparing 40% and 30%). The summary of the survey results lacks precision, and some comparisons are difficult to follow due to grammatical errors. To reach a higher band, ensure that data is presented clearly and that comparisons are logically linked to the trends observed in the charts.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'before' and 'after' without sufficient variety. Some sentences are poorly connected, and the flow between ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the final paragraph where the transition between different satisfaction categories is abrupt. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'big difference', 'reconstruction', and 'redevelopment' throughout the text. There are also instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'visitors how are 30% satisfied' and 'survey accounted the proportion of very satisfied was boomed'. These errors occasionally impede the clarity of the message. To improve, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'significant increase', 'fluctuation', or 'proportion', and focus on using these words in their correct collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the table chart illustrates'), missing articles, and awkward sentence structures (e.g., 'the survey accounted the proportion of very satisfied was boomed'). While you attempt some complex sentences, they are often marred by errors, such as '15% of people, which accounted as they were dissatisfied'. The range of structures is limited, and the frequent errors in basic grammar and punctuation mean that the reader must work harder to understand the intended meaning.

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