Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table chart illustrates the number of visitors who visit the museum before and after reconstruction, and pie chart shows result of survey what is the experience of visitors before and after developing the museum.

Overall, it is evident that, before reconstruction majority of the people who visited, and their experience was unsatisfied. However after redevelopment of museum people were more interested and satisfied too, and also the numbers of visitors were increased.

To begin with, there was a big difference in visitors before and after refurbishment of museum, 74,000 before rebuilt, and 92,000 after reconstructed. On the other hand, result of survey before redevelop the museum, there were no big difference in number of people who are dissatisfied and satisfied, 40% and 30% respectively. Moreover, 10% of the audience was very unsatisfied, and people who are very satisfied were only 5% higher than very dissatisfied. and 5% of the people had no response.

After the year of redevelopment of museum visitors how are 30% satisfied before development , but after a year it has grown to 40% respectively. The survey accounted the proportion of very satisfied was boomed after development 35%. Furthermore, 15% of people, which accounted as they were dissatisfied, and the percentage of people who are extremely dissatisfied and no response were almost same.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features of the table and charts. You successfully highlight the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear, analytical overview. While you mention that visitor numbers increased and satisfaction improved, the description of the data is occasionally confusing, such as the sentence '30% satisfied before development, but after a year it has grown to 40% respectively'. The use of 'respectively' is incorrect here as it does not refer to two distinct sets of data in that specific clause. To improve, ensure that comparisons are more precise and that the overview clearly synthesizes the trends rather than just listing figures.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'To begin with', and 'On the other hand'. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed, and the use of cohesive devices is occasionally mechanical or misused. For example, the phrase 'After the year of redevelopment of museum visitors how are 30% satisfied' is grammatically awkward and disrupts the logical progression of the paragraph. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to track which data point is being discussed. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words will help create a smoother, more professional flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'reconstruction', 'redevelopment', 'proportion', and 'survey'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and awkward phrasing, such as 'result of survey what is the experience' and 'the percentage of people who are extremely dissatisfied and no response were almost same'. The word 'boomed' is also slightly informal for an Academic Task 1 report. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and academic vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'experienced a significant rise' instead of 'boomed'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include incorrect verb forms ('before rebuilt', 'before redevelop'), missing articles, and awkward sentence construction ('the survey accounted the proportion of very satisfied was boomed'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some run-on sentences and unnecessary capitalization. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of passive voice for reporting data would significantly improve your accuracy.

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