Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The table depicts the total number of visitors to the Ashdown Museum , while pie chart demonstrates the outcome of survey about visitors satisfaction throughout the year.

From overall perspective, the number of visitors are inclined after refurbishment of the museum. while the share of dissatisfied visitors decreased significantly.

Regarding the pie charts, the percentage of visitors who were very satisfied rose from 15% before the refurbishment to 35% afterward. The satisfied category also experienced a slight rise, increasing from 30% to 40%. In contrast, the dissatisfied group declined significantly, dropping from 40% before renovation to just 15% after. Similarly, the share for the very dissatisfied visitors halved from 10% to 5%over the same period of time. The proportion of visitors who never responded to the survey remained steady at 5% in both years.

According to the table, throughout the year before the museum underwent renovation, 74,000 people went there to visit it, while this number rose to 92,000 by the year after renovation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all parts of the task by summarizing the visitor numbers and satisfaction levels. You have successfully identified the main trends, such as the increase in visitor numbers and the shift toward higher satisfaction ratings. However, the report could be improved by integrating the data more fluidly. For instance, the table data is presented in a separate paragraph at the end, which disrupts the logical flow. To reach a higher band, ensure that comparisons between the two data sets (visitor numbers and satisfaction) are more deeply analyzed rather than just listing the figures.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Regarding', 'In contrast', and 'Similarly' to link your points. However, the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is slightly abrupt. Additionally, the final paragraph regarding the table data feels disconnected from the rest of the report. Improving the use of referencing and ensuring that each paragraph builds upon the previous one would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'refurbishment', 'significantly', and 'proportion'. There are some minor issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'the number of visitors are inclined' (should be 'increased' or 'rose') and 'outcome of survey about visitors satisfaction' (should be 'survey results regarding visitor satisfaction'). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, it lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band score. Try to incorporate more varied synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. However, there are several grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement ('the number of visitors are inclined') and missing articles ('the outcome of survey'). Punctuation is generally acceptable, though there are some spacing issues around commas. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent article usage will help improve your accuracy.

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