Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The charts illustrate the result of survey asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit during the same two periods before and after refurbishment.

In general, after the refurbishment of Ashdown museum the total number of visitors increased. Moreover, the amount of visitors being satisfied increased and there was a decline in visitors being dissatisfied.

In regard, to the total number of visitors to Ashdown museum during the year before refurbishment was 74,000. After the refurbishment of the museum there was a rise in the number of visitors to Ashdown museum was at 92,000. Moreover, the result of the survey conducted shows that after the refurbishment there was an increase in the visitors who were very satisfied was at 15% before refurbishment is now at 35% after the refurbishment.

Furthermore, the amount of visitors being satisfied saw a drastic increase after the refurbishment being at 40%. As for before the refurbishments it was at 30%. In regards to the visitors who were dissatisfied was 40% but, after the refurbishment there was a significant decline in dissatisfaction which is now at 15%. Moreover the visitors who were very dissatisfied saw a decline after the refurbishment which is at 5% as supposed to before the refurbishment which was at 10%. And the rest of the remaining visitors who didn't give a response remained stable at 5% during the two periods.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response successfully covers all parts of the task. You have identified the main features, such as the increase in total visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. You have also made relevant comparisons between the two periods. However, the report could be improved by grouping the data more effectively to highlight the trends rather than listing figures sequentially. For example, the shift from 'dissatisfied' to 'very satisfied' is a key trend that could be highlighted more prominently as a central feature of the data. Overall, the response is clear and fulfills the requirements of the task well.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction and body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'In general', 'Moreover', and 'Furthermore' to link ideas. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and the flow between sentences could be smoother. For instance, the phrase 'In regard, to the total number' is grammatically awkward and disrupts the flow. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the visitor numbers from the satisfaction survey results, which helps the reader follow the information. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of cohesive devices and ensuring that referencing is precise.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'refurbishment', 'dissatisfaction', and 'stable'. There are some instances of repetitive phrasing, such as 'the amount of visitors' and 'the number of visitors'. Additionally, there are minor errors in word choice, such as 'as supposed to' instead of 'as opposed to'. While these errors do not impede communication, they limit the precision of your writing. To improve, try to use more varied synonyms for 'increase' and 'decline' and ensure collocations are accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with preposition usage and sentence construction. For example, 'the number of visitors to Ashdown museum was at 92,000' is a redundant structure, and 'In regard, to the total number' contains an unnecessary comma. There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and tense consistency in some clauses. While these errors rarely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on sentence structure and proofreading for basic grammatical slips will help improve your accuracy.

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