Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given table and pie charts illustrate about the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum and the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit during the year before and the year after.
Overall, it evident that there were some numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum about the year before and after refurbished in the table. Additionally, the pie charts had different modes. They also changed during the same two periods.
Looking first at the table, it started at 74,000 visitors, when it wasn't refurbishment. But after refurbishment it has 92,000 visitors in Ashdown Museum.
Regarding the pie chart, there were five modes: very satisfied, satisfied, dissatisfied, very dissatisfied, and no response. When it wasn't refurbishment dissatisfied were the highest number of visitors. It had 40 visitors. Other modes were satisfied, no response, and very satisfied had 10, 5, and 15 visitors. Moreover, satisfied visitors had 30. On the other hand, after refurbishment there are some changed among the modes. The very satisfied has 35 visitors. The no response remained unchanged. The very dissatisfied was changed to 5 visitors. The dissatisfied was significantly decreased the visitors and it has 15 visitors. Finally, the satisfied are 35 visitors.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the task by summarizing the main features of the table and charts. However, the analysis is superficial and lacks a clear overview of the trends. For instance, the statement 'the pie charts had different modes' is vague and does not highlight the significant shift in visitor satisfaction. While you identified the increase in visitor numbers and the change in satisfaction levels, the comparison between the two periods is underdeveloped. To improve, focus on synthesizing the data rather than listing figures, and ensure the overview clearly captures the most significant changes, such as the dramatic improvement in visitor satisfaction post-refurbishment.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'Looking first at the table' and 'Regarding the pie chart'. Some transitions feel forced, and the logical progression between sentences is occasionally disrupted by awkward phrasing, such as 'the pie charts had different modes'. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to track which data point is being discussed. Improving the variety and precision of linking words will help create a smoother flow between your ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. You rely on repetitive phrasing like 'modes' and 'visitors' throughout the text. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'when it wasn't refurbishment' instead of 'before the refurbishment' and 'there are some changed' instead of 'there were some changes'. To achieve a higher score, try to use more varied and precise terminology to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'witnessed a significant rise', or 'a marked improvement in satisfaction'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'it evident that there were some numbers of visitors' (missing 'is'), 'when it wasn't refurbishment' (incorrect tense/structure), and 'the dissatisfied was significantly decreased the visitors' (incorrect passive/active voice usage). Subject-verb agreement and article usage are inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensuring that verb tenses are used correctly to describe past events and comparisons.
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